Hmm... so much of this is so obvious--and yet slightly off--that I'm feeling like we're being set up (in that it's not Rarity who put Twilight up to it, but Fluttershy, and Rarity was only helping Twilight out without knowing the specifics. Also hint with the receipt being a mistake at the end.).
So, hi, a few chapters in now, and I find myself really empathizing with Sunset and, funnily enough, her friends. While this is a porn fic, and while it is very hot that Sunset has a horsedick that I couldn't help myself but lust over, it's really refreshing to see restraint be exhibited by Sunset instead of just letting her give in to her carnal urges. This fic strikes a really nice balance between how indescribably desirable such an appendage would be and how badly she wants to let her friends service it, with... A very thoughtful and realistic interpretation of, again, restraint. It isn't merely that Sunset hates this newfound horsecock and what it's done to her own self-image (as well as her life with having to maintain such a thing), but it examines how her friendships are impacted by it, and this only further reinforces her hatred of it. It's ruined how she sees herself, it's ruined how it's become her interactions with Fluttershy, it's ruined how Rarity and Fluttershy see Sunset, and how Sunset sees them. It's really a destructive force, and to see that in a clop fic about Sunset having a horsecock is really surprising, and it makes you do a double-take. And your writing does this, mind you, in a way that can be processed effortlessly by the reader. In that sense, it's not only hot, but it's also emotionally intelligent, and for that, this fic's earned being called excellent!
11177405 Yarr, matey, them's some kind words what ye've written 'ere! Please t'see ye've caught the same winds as me sails, but keep it up an' I'm like as not t' start a-blushin'! Ya-ha-harr!
Hmm... so much of this is so obvious--and yet slightly off--that I'm feeling like we're being set up (in that it's not Rarity who put Twilight up to it, but Fluttershy, and Rarity was only helping Twilight out without knowing the specifics. Also hint with the receipt being a mistake at the end.).
Poor Twilight. :(
So, hi, a few chapters in now, and I find myself really empathizing with Sunset and, funnily enough, her friends. While this is a porn fic, and while it is very hot that Sunset has a horsedick
that I couldn't help myself but lust over, it's really refreshing to see restraint be exhibited by Sunset instead of just letting her give in to her carnal urges. This fic strikes a really nice balance between how indescribably desirable such an appendage would be and how badly she wants to let her friends service it, with... A very thoughtful and realistic interpretation of, again, restraint. It isn't merely that Sunset hates this newfound horsecock and what it's done to her own self-image (as well as her life with having to maintain such a thing), but it examines how her friendships are impacted by it, and this only further reinforces her hatred of it. It's ruined how she sees herself, it's ruined how it's become her interactions with Fluttershy, it's ruined how Rarity and Fluttershy see Sunset, and how Sunset sees them. It's really a destructive force, and to see that in a clop fic about Sunset having a horsecock is really surprising, and it makes you do a double-take. And your writing does this, mind you, in a way that can be processed effortlessly by the reader. In that sense, it's not only hot, but it's also emotionally intelligent, and for that, this fic's earned being called excellent!11177405
Yarr, matey, them's some kind words what ye've written 'ere! Please t'see ye've caught the same winds as me sails, but keep it up an' I'm like as not t' start a-blushin'! Ya-ha-harr!