Very nice chapter. Just a few things I feel the need to point out.
. Two seperate, small ziplock bags with a hair from him and a hair from Trixie he managed to swipe followed soon after.
First off, "separate" is misspelled. Secondly, an actual hair follicle doesn't really have the material one can use for a DNA test. It pretty much only works if your get the root or possible some skin from it.
"Well, I loved this game when I was filly, but I never won anything. And I never had a father or special to win anything for me"
I think you want to add a word between "special" and "to", like "somepony". And lastly, I think you're missing a comma at the end of this sentence. Still, I really enjoyed this chapter and look forward to more.
What is there to talk about? Impregnating your daughter is one of the hottest things you could ever do.
Very nice chapter. Just a few things I feel the need to point out.
First off, "separate" is misspelled. Secondly, an actual hair follicle doesn't really have the material one can use for a DNA test. It pretty much only works if your get the root or possible some skin from it.
I think you want to add a word between "special" and "to", like "somepony". And lastly, I think you're missing a comma at the end of this sentence.
Still, I really enjoyed this chapter and look forward to more.
9715410 Thanks for pointing out the mistakes. Fixed. Damn autocorrect must’ve gotten rid of the pony in somepony.
I may think about changing the DNA thing. It just seemed like the easiest way he could get some kind of sample. And I’ve seen hair used in fiction.
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Perhaps some saliva he got from her wine glass?
9715605 Or any cup she was drinking from
Oh man oh man that was insane. Sound like a broken record now but more please.