All Mayor Mare wants is for everything to go perfectly. Her death is no exception.
Unsubmitted entry into EFNW's 2019 Iron Author contest.
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Really is terrible when a mind has deteriorated.
Deep down, Discord does care. He's just a right a****** about it.
Who knew Discord cared so much!
Very nice story, Mono.
And I'm glad your Aunt Martha is in the best place of all: your memories and your heart.
The long goodbye is heartbreaking to see.
This story, however, was very heartwarming, I loved Discord in it, and even though some tears were shed they were shed with a smile still on my face.
Very well done, again, Mono!
"As long as you want"
Wonderful.
That was a sweet story, and neat to see you tackle these characters (the latter in a non-villainous way).
You were waffling on whether this needed the Sad tag on Discord, and yeah, I can see it going either way. While death is sad, this death went as Mayor Mare wanted and Discord is making sure her last moments are pleasant.
Well. That was devastating. It's a shame you didn't submit this; it probably would've done very well.
A beautiful story Mono, I like it when you tackle things so kindly as you did with Discord.
I enjoyed this story - there a reason you didn't submit it?
Every bit as sweet and poignant as you made it sound during EFNW. Lovely work.
Why is everyone writing sad stuff this week?
my heart 💜
Feels bad to see someone in this state.
But it's an excellent cathartic relief, well done.
Been there, been crushed when they've forgotten who you are. In his own way, Discord is such a sweetie to indulge her.
I wonder whether part of his kindness also stems from a grudging respect that she once had the guts to try to regulate the behavior of a demigod.
That's a really sweet way to help those in such need. My grandma is rather worse, but she's 95 already, so that's to be expected.
This is kindness in giving care and comfort generosity in taking the time, of all he could be doing with a festival and stay with a dying mare laughter keeping her spirits up even when she continually circles to find humor in memories Honesty by never pulling the wool loyalty in being there until the end. Thats magic yo
He doesn't need to get Fluttershy. She's right there, it would seem.
I've borne witness to this sort of conversation quite a number of times now.
A person reduced to fragments of thought skipping around like a record spinning beneath a broken needle arm, the vestiges of a mind sparkling out sporadically like the dying embers of a fire... small spots of sudden brightness before winking out entirely.
It's the only thing I dread, losing my mind to dementia. But then, I won't even be aware of it when it happens.
Better to go out in a furious nuclear blaze of unforgettable glory and carnage that leaves so great a scar upon the land that your name is whispered in terror by the survivors for an eon! (Alondro plans to initiate a quantum spin inversion matrix within himself... physicists will understand the implications.)
9639023 Martha... (shudders at sudden BvS flashbacks)
This was very sweet and moving... well done.
I'M NOT CRYING YOU'RE CRYING. SHUT UP.
I didn't expect her dementia. Discord was interesting in this too, not especially fazed or grim, and not his usual self about things either. That was a good balance.
This was sweet, and devastating, and touching, and lots of other pretty complicated emotions.
Thank you for it.
There was an iron author contest too?!
I think I cried
Sweet and sad. Nicely done.
I let out a breath I didn't know I was holding by the end of this
Also the song that played in my head was stairway to heaven for most of this
For a being of unimaginable power, he found the time to sit with a dying mare.
Somber
What I enjoy the most about this story is that, since this is 10+ years into the future, we can presume that some of Fluttershy's kindness has rubbed off on Discord in a way. Perhaps he knows that even he can't prevent the imminent death of a pony, and he isn't his usual joking self because he realizes and appreciates the gravity of the situation. Wanting to know that he could bring happiness to the mare in her final moments.
I've never been a fan of Discord post-Season 2, but its stories like these that show that he could believably be a benevolent entity, and this story certainly made it feel natural. Keep up the good work.
Poor Mayor Mare. I think she came down with dimentia.
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Just don't destroy the planet itself. I still have uses for it.
My mother's mind is gone as well because of her mental illness, and for the most of my childhood I didn't knew her but her disconnected fragments of once was a personality. Though, despite any old built-up hard feelings, it was really important for me to kinda touch lightly this vulnerable part of my soul that still cares for her and regrets that our relationship can't end differently, that this terrible state of deterioration and constant fear of hers... it has to be this way.
You really helped me accept that with your piece. Thank you a lot.