A young Dusk Shine grows immensely curious about something concerning the opposite sex. Maybe his sister will be a willing to help him with his quandary... or not. At least, not at first.
It was something of an imperative, disgust was a fleeting emotion, for the nectar that covered his hoof looked like honey to his eyes - sweet, and mouth wateringly delicious. He brought it to his mouth, dragging his tongue over his limb, scraping against the marecum. At last, he understood the secrecy, why mares were so intent on keeping this secret close to their chests. The way the flavour danced on his tongue, the rush of excitement that washed over his young body. He recalled a definition in his head, the only one suitable to describe the taste. Mares had literal ambrosia between their legs!
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Assured with the knowledge she was as deep into sleeping as Dusk was with a good book, he traipsed forward into ‘den’. He was wary not to make any noise, and kept his breaths shallow lest he roused her. He climbed onto her bed, his hind legs flailing as he struggled to pull himself up, finally pulling onto the foot of his sister’s bed with a slight grunt; clambering to his hooves and feeling a swell of pride at accomplishing the first stretch of his mission. However, the dumb smile her (he) wore shrank into something a lot more timid when he landed his eyes on his sister.
Okay so this one was wonderfully written. You definitely spent a lot of time with this and your skillful use of the words really shows your experience. Form description to description you envoke a very detailed viewpoint of Dusk's experiences. Not gonna lie this does drag on and sometimes it makes me long for it to get straight to the point. You surely did your time to perfect as much of this as you could and I see not many flaws. Though if I had to nitpick, it's the character Dusk for me. Being curious myself I took to books and research to find out many things in my life. Granted my folks instilled basic knowledge and I took to that like a pro, yet for the obvious stuff. That took more so my own reach. So it was hard for me to relate to little Dusk here.
Bolero: a one-movement orchestral piece by the French composer Maurice Ravel (1875–1937).
Neat
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Knowledge bomb. Nice
Gotta love genderbent Equestria.
Good shit
Ah, the innocence of youth...
... soon to be lost.
That would be interesting.
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Also, Dudley Moore's character uses it as seduction music in the movie 10
Judging time!
Okay so this one was wonderfully written. You definitely spent a lot of time with this and your skillful use of the words really shows your experience. Form description to description you envoke a very detailed viewpoint of Dusk's experiences. Not gonna lie this does drag on and sometimes it makes me long for it to get straight to the point. You surely did your time to perfect as much of this as you could and I see not many flaws. Though if I had to nitpick, it's the character Dusk for me. Being curious myself I took to books and research to find out many things in my life. Granted my folks instilled basic knowledge and I took to that like a pro, yet for the obvious stuff. That took more so my own reach. So it was hard for me to relate to little Dusk here.
Can't blame Dusk. They practically forced him to find out on his own. How irresponsible!