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(Left 4 Dead crossover) Francis, being the idiot that he is, messes around with a computer, and soon finds himself, Zoey, and Louis in a strange land full of ponies, while Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, and Applejack get transported into the human world, to find Bill and a city full of zombies.

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Comments ( 93 )

FFFFFFFFFFU-FFFFFFFFFFFU-FU-FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-KEEP IT COMING!:pinkiehappy:

NOW THIS IS A CROSSOVER!!!

WHY NO CHAPTER 3!!!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!??!?!

So two of them have wings does this mean they are slowly turning into ponys?:pinkiehappy:

Wait... What? I was playing that chapter not 20 minutes ago! Are you a spy?!

I like the idea, quite a few meta references in it, but I think they kind of ditract from the story. Nice idea, I'd like to see where this goes.

Interesting premise. The plot and action more than makes up for the lack of description and slight repitition. This story has got so much potential... onward to chapter 3!!

my favourite zombie killing series mixed with ponies? Insta-track

I come online after shitty night of no sleep... bad day before hand then no coffee when wake up:pinkiesick:.... and i see this............. First reaction:rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh: Second Reaction:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:
Third Reaction:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

THIS IS GOLD!
PURE GOLD!

:rainbowkiss::heart:

63179 I think that when they switched world with :rainbowkiss::ajbemused::fluttershysad: they took RD And Fluttershy's wings

63179 They switched wings because I felt that them having wings against the zombies would be too unfair and detract from the storyline. I.E. They would fly above the clouds and be invisible.

hmmm, i think the suvivors are from gmod, with the way thier acting....

63368

Now you just need some special infected secretly roaming around Ponyville.

63455

yes indeed

deploy fragmentation zombies here


btw sweet shit bro

Before I put this on this website, I was considering stopping it. From these comments, it's blatantly obvious I need to continue this.

This story is considerably better than I was expecting from the summary. I'll keep watching where this goes.

I do need to comment on this sentence: "The Witches started to stop wandering and started to choose a spot to cry in for the night." Don't say they "started to stop" because that's awkward, say they "stopped wandering." Other than that, the writing is pretty good.

63998 As they say, you're your own worst critic. I heavily edited Chapter 1, and I didn't really think I should edit it too much, so I barely touched Chapter 2, aside from the occasional grammar mistake somebody else would catch.

I think ya ment futilely when you said effortlessly.

Besides that, this is a very interesting concept and you're doing a damn good job so far.

Oh lord, before I read the comments, I though they woul switch people... Rd to francis, and reversed

... So yeah, MOAR!!! :raritystarry:

I hate Left 4 Dead and I'm still tracking this, because now I can actually enjoy the characters without any of the games' issues getting in my way. :rainbowkiss:

Oh god, after that pills crack with Louis, I'm imagining the Left 4 Dead characters as their hilarious Garry's Mod versions instead of the in-game serious ones. Complete with derpy Gmod facial expressions, unrealistic Gmod movements, and hilariously deformed mouth movements. :rainbowlaugh:

Do continue. I like this!

how come its a l4d crossover, but the tags doesn't even mention horror??

Francis doing the Applebloom spin?

I lol'd so hard.

Chapter 3 done. I don't like this one as much as the others, it feels bland and like it was an unnecessary chapter.

A lot of exposition in this chapter... It's hard to come up with a reasonable explanation for colorful ponies in the Left 4 Dead world, but you handled it okay. You could've slipped in a Black Mesa reference as far as the interuniversal travel goes - Valve is always tying together their games like that.

VERY convenient for you that L4D takes place in Philadelphia, and I'm glad you took advantage of that for an entertaining scene.

Now that all of your setup is figured out, I'm looking forward to some fun zombie killing. With ponies! :pinkiehappy:

83818 Don't worry, I'll have a better explanation soon. I personally can't wait to write the next chapter. But thanks for the support.

Bill used to be great zombie killer, but then he took an arrow to the knee

83822 Actually he took a piece of shrapnel to the knee, back in Vietnam. 2 days after the first infection, he was having knee surgery but it never was performed because the hospital staff turned into zombies.
And that joke is really getting old.

LOVED THIS CHAPTER

die mothafuckin' zombies, DIE!

Nice and accurate speech!
Time to stay up all night reading fantastic writing...AGAIN!:twilightblush:

Oh, boy this is great.
It's always a marshmallow with Rarity isn't it?:duck:

Not even Bill can resist the cuteness that is Fluttershy! :yay:

FUCK YEAH ZOMBIE KILLING

HOO-RA BILL

83818 Jason. There is a reason valve is trying to piece together all their games. One. SImple. Reason

HL3

IT'S GONNA HAVE TF2, PORTAL, HL CHARACTERS, AND EVERY OTHER KIND OF CHARACTER THAT VALVE HAS MADE IT'S GONNA BE A MASSIVE EXPLOSION OF GAMES IN ONE GIANT BOMB OF EPICNESS AND FUS-DO-RAH

Personally i think it will be better than Skyrim

But really. Can ANYTHING beat Skyrim?

90151 IN RESPONSE TO MY COMMENT IT'S BASICALLY JUST GONNA BE SUCH A BIG DA FUCK BOMB IT'S GOING TO LEAVE YOU WANTING MORE.

HOW DO I KNOW? YOU ASK?
I FUCKING KNOW. CUZ I PLAYED THE GODDAMN HL3 BETA BITCHES! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.

OK my insane time is over.

my main critique would be that there does not seem to be much happening back in Ponyville. There are no zombies, no danger and thus, no excitement. I do not know if you actually DO have something in store, but from reading this so far, i get the impression that nothing exciting is about to happen in the near future, making the parts in Ponyville have been dull in comparison to the humans' world. Fluttershy's fret over the killing was a bit boring to read, but then again it is a necessary part of the story. Maybe you could bring your point across in a more concise way or something.
I'm looking forward to some zombie ass kicking in the next chapter! Things would get so much better once you start having Bill and the ponies fight hoards of zombies and then you can show how the different advantages/disadvantages the ponies have will come into play.

90518
I think there could be zombies in Ponyville. As stated in this comic ( http://www.l4d.com/comic/comic.php?page=61 ), the four survivors are all carriers of the virus. Which could lead to another wide spread plague of sorts, but this time in Equestria.

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