9616213 I did notice that when I glanced at the last couple paragraphs again....Sometimes it made it hard to tell what was going on, I completely spaced in the first paragraph when it mentioned the cat, as I had forgot the cat's name...and existance....till I got reminded.
9616343 I didn't get to this level but yeah, the grammar errors are relevant compared to the lack of commas, I saw maybe two or three only in this chapter, but I really like this story and I am used to worse
Why would you make him become female? You know what... its your story i'm just disappointed you didnt make her a futa. You still get breasts but keep the shlong.
ah I get that reference now let me rebuttal with this one
Following total atomic annihilation, it will fall upon you to uphold the vision of this great nation
S.P.E.C.I.A.L spells out that you're quite swell
This...needs an editor. Very good and has a lot of potential, but there were a lot of grammar mistakes.....
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I miss commas
9616213
I did notice that when I glanced at the last couple paragraphs again....Sometimes it made it hard to tell what was going on, I completely spaced in the first paragraph when it mentioned the cat, as I had forgot the cat's name...and existance....till I got reminded.
9616343
I didn't get to this level but yeah, the grammar errors are relevant compared to the lack of commas, I saw maybe two or three only in this chapter, but I really like this story and I am used to worse
Why would you make him become female? You know what... its your story i'm just disappointed you didnt make her a futa. You still get breasts but keep the shlong.