A computer game developer gets set to the world of Fall Of Equestria and has to learn to service in his new surrounding and avoid throwing away his morals in the twisted world he is in.
“I honestly hope I do as well,” Satou responded with a smile as they both took a bite out of their steaks at the same time, as he thought “You know… it tastes like a bit like chicken. ”
After a few seconds, he got up before looking in front of him to see one of the Lizardmen shakily getting up to its feet, “and of course one survives.”
Does it need saying that this, so far, is a direct ripoff from DesuMachi? Event for event, with slight alterations. Obviously the Displacement idea is new, but also standard fare.
I'm hoping you're going to do something interesting with it down the line, Author, because as much as I actually would like to see DesuMachi placed in Equestria, if all it amounts to is switching visuals, then I'm already familiar with the story.
“Red means willing, Black means unwilling and even though I’ve never witnessed the last their are purple collars that class the wearer as being ‘fucked silly’ is how it was explained by the Caribou that I belonged to before.”
Okay, that purple disturbs me somehow... but only because I've come to associate it with something entirely different...
Still, Color-Coded for Convenience. I can get behind that.
“Yes Master, it’s not strange for us, when someone in the village died we would often use all of their body for anything from food to clothing, and even their claws as tools.”
I find the concept interesting enough. I even see some fun references to lightnovels with that meteor shower and the lizardem. But I think I'll wait for that announced rewrite as I am quite picky with the grammar. Either way, power on and give it a good rewrite. I'll give you a preemptive like in support and come back to this when it pops up on my follows.
He simply scrolled through all of his information and found his level had increased from Level 1 to Level 31 and that his stats had increased by quite a large margin from when he had started.
This is a small mistake, but it's going to bother me all f****** day. 'level 1 to level 31' incorrect
'level 1 to level 310' correct.
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( Crystal Cock Resistance - Lv.10 - Complete immunity to the effects of the Crystal Cock, no effects we will present includes increased Lust and unstoppable need to have sex with the opposite sex. )
why i feel hungry?
ok i do not like the slaver or rape
Does it need saying that this, so far, is a direct ripoff from DesuMachi? Event for event, with slight alterations. Obviously the Displacement idea is new, but also standard fare.
I'm hoping you're going to do something interesting with it down the line, Author, because as much as I actually would like to see DesuMachi placed in Equestria, if all it amounts to is switching visuals, then I'm already familiar with the story.
Okay, that purple disturbs me somehow... but only because I've come to associate it with something entirely different...
Still, Color-Coded for Convenience. I can get behind that.
I does it start with "i' and continue with "he"?
This reminds me of Goblin Slayer Abridged
Note to self Always by Shady items from someone at a Expo especially if that person transports you to another world.
I find the concept interesting enough. I even see some fun references to lightnovels with that meteor shower and the lizardem.
But I think I'll wait for that announced rewrite as I am quite picky with the grammar.
Either way, power on and give it a good rewrite. I'll give you a preemptive like in support and come back to this when it pops up on my follows.
This is a small mistake, but it's going to bother me all f****** day.
'level 1 to level 31' incorrect
'level 1 to level 310' correct.
Unless there were less then in the original, and the past version. That or level ups are harder to get, or they (the army) were worth less exp.
I think I found an error in here
So its basically the same starting plot as the manga