Civil war has ravaged Cybertron, homeworld to the Transformers, for millions of years.
Megatron, leader of the Decepticons, has recently discovered an ancient power that could give him the edge to win over the hated Autobots led by his mortal enemy, Optimus Prime.
Called, "Equestrian Magic", this power remains under the protection of seven organic life forms, who reside in a primitive world designated as... EARTH.
* My Little Pony: Equestria Girls and Transformers: Prime are both owned by Hasbro.
* In terms of EQG continuity, the story takes place after Holidays Unwrapped.
* In terms of TFP continuity, it takes place in an alternate reality where neither Autobots nor Decepticons ever met the human characters of the series, and both factions have members that are slightly different from the ones in the actual show.
Loving this
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Glad to hear that
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Welcome
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I'm assuming you're also a big fan of Transformers: Prime?
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Yep, Beside from the live action movie TF Prime was my first transformer show I ever saw
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I see. Well, I've seen some of the other Transformers cartoons, but Prime is easily my favorite out of all of them. So, who's your favorite character in that show? Mine is Starscream.
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Smokescreen is my
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Also, Ratchet. He has one of the best lines in the show and one of the flew show that did him right
Loving this can't wait for more
Uhhhh no. Bee's communicate through dance moves, each type of message they pass requires movements. And before you ask, Fluttershy should'nt be able to communicate with insects. Insects have a different type of communication no words can comprehend.
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I see...
But if Bee does communicate through dance moves, which one of the girls is going to understand what he's trying to say?
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It depends on who learned about it. If I know anything it's either Twilight cause she read a book about it or Fluttershy, cause she's an animal expert.
And I think the way Bumblebee communicates is the use of his radio. By combining words and songs spoken, and re-creates them into a sentence.
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Funny you should say that. The whole speaking through the radio thing will actually be integrated into the story in the later chapters.
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Ohhhh nice
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Yep. It's going to help Bee forge a really strong bond with one of the girls. I won't say which one, because I don't want to reveal major spoilers.
I’m curious to know why you’re putting voice actors’ names for the characters. Isn’t that unnecessary since we can always imagine what voices they’re using?
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Hmmm... Good point.
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It works better for a credits chapter, methinks.
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Is a credits chapter even allowed?
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There's no rule against it.
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I see…
I'll think about making it.
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Aha.
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Only time will tell.
Minor correction, Cliffjumper's alt mod in TF: Prime is actually a 1970 Dodge Challenger, but a Dodge Charger is still cool. 😎
Which Autobots will you show?
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A few more of them will be mentioned or appear in flashbacks, but the ones featured in this chapter are the main Autobot characters of the story.
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Hmm, better have some Arcee sass show, her and Sunset could ... errr ...
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1. Arcee will make an impact on the story, but not in a way you may expect. After all, this takes place in a reality slightly different from the actual show.
2. Sunset is supposed to have a different Autobot partner to banter and bond with.
Laserbeak doesn't transform into a drone. He becomes part of Soundwave. Soundwave is the one who transforms into a drone.
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Alright, I have made the necessary changes. Thanks for letting me know about the error.
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No problem. It kinda helps to study up on the series you plan a crossover with.
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Yep, it definitely does
I'm looking forward to what happens next, keep up the good work.
I do wonder if the Dazzlings or Equestrian villains such as Chrysalis, Sombra or Tirek will make a future appearance?
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Most likely in a sequel or spin-off.
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Oh awesome!
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When are the rest of the Autobots gonna appear?!
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During the later chapters, no doubt.
The story is suspended?
I ask because I can't wait to read the rest.
Among the many Transformers, Transformers Prime is one of my favourites and seeing a Crossover with Equestria Girls makes me happy.
By the way, very good start. I love it.
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Thanks so much for your feedback. I will continue writing it as soon as I can.
Okay, just a few things I have to share:
1). In nearly all your paragraphs, you keep leaving the comma outside the quotation marks whereas they should be inside. Never leave a comma outside the quotes whenever a line of dialogue is followed by a “said” tag.
2). That very long paragraph containing Shockwave’s dialogue to Starscream is way too long. Make it into shorter paragraphs to make the dialogue more readable.
3). I find your backstory for Wheeljack problematic because he’s never been this emotionally driven before in Transformers: Prime. So I would consider him to be acting out of character, but if this is your version of Wheeljack you want to write to give him more depth of character then I won’t stop you. I can respect that.
Despite the issues I have just stated, you’re doing good. Keep it up. 😊
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Alright, I have done the changes you recommended in your first and second remark. As for your third remark, I suggest that you read the last couple of sentences I wrote in the long description of the story.
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Just saw the changes you made. Much better although you missed some spots.
Also, thank you for the reminder. I still don’t like your version of Wheeljack, but we all have our preferences.
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Would you prefer that he was more similar to his version from the show?
Also, what do you think of how the other Transformers are portrayed so far in the story?
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If you want to continue writing him as such, then by all means resume.
But since you’re so willing to hear me out, then fine. Just keep him as accurate to the show as possible. Because I can get a little sensitive if they deviate from their respective personalities in any way, shape, or form. That’s why I made that third remark in the first place.
As for the other Transformers, they are quite accurate as they can be. So good job on that.
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Got it