rain's pouring but it never lasts <3
It was a normal day for the eight-year old apple farmer. All of her chores were done for the day and the sun was beginning to set.
Normally, young Applejack would head inside to eat dinner and prepare for bed. Just as she was about to pick her last apple from the tree, she saw a rainbow-like tail peeking from behind another tree.
Zap-Apple season was near and she figured one had grown early but...
Why was it crying?
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This seemed slightly OOC, but it was still cute!
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I’ll try! I just uploaded a second story, its just waiting to post. Thank You!
So I'm getting round to reading your stories now, and I loved this! It's really cute and I can't wait to read the others!!
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Thank You!!
THIS IS AMAZING BRO I LOVE IT BRO!!! * Tae Voice*😂😂
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Thank you for the comment *Sassy Joonie Voice*
Taking into consideration this is your first and a little older story, I can say it is a nice short read
It was a little rough around the edges here and there with some awkward phrasing and runaway grammar errors, but still readable. What my trained eye found a little more annoying were the unnecessary commas after direct speech, as well as some recurring faulty punctuation and capitalization in the dialogues. I can explain more, if you wish, just don’t want to leave there an awfully long comment.
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Thank you!! And yeah, I quickly realized that the commas were very out of place and many things were out of order in this story 😅. I quickly fixed most of the errors in my other stories though! Hopefully one day I can get the motivation to give this story a little bit of a makeover and improve it a bit.
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You are welcome! As I said, I noticed this is an older story, so some redundancy in my advice was to be expected
Hmm. A little rushed for my taste, but it was still sweet nonetheless. I liked this part the best:
Made me crack up.
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. Glad you still enjoyed it! I plan to get back to this style actually this week, I took a three month break from this series as I felt burned out. 
. But I’m glad you still enjoyed it and hope you check out the rest!
Yea, my first story was a bit rough around the edges