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Gonna be a whole lot of Fluttercord mess

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Discord is missing, and nopony else besides Fluttershy seems to care! She sets out to find him alone; meanwhile Twilight discovers the shocking truth.
(Based on the Once Upon A Time episode Heart of Darkness)

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 41 )

I'm already intrigued. Please write some more, I'm dying to hear what happens next.

Ooooooooo Super interesting! Just make sure to reread for any mistakes I found a couple, over all I love the story and can’t wait for more keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:
~Ara

YAY FIRST LIKE WILL GO TO MEEEEE
~Ara

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Thank you!! Would you mind pointing out the mistakes? Thanks for reading my story :heart:

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Fluttershy sat before Twilight, a cup of tea tightly clasped between her hooves. Her muscles tensed, eyes roaming around the kept castle fretfully. The non-cluttered-ness of it all somehow made her feel worse. Discord had been acting strange lately, in an even stranger-than-Discord- way. He had missed several weekend teas, and was not responding to her letters. Fluttershy became sick with worry that he’d been taken or hurt. The others…very much doubted this. Her bottom hoof began to tap the floor at a pace, eyes meeting Twilight[color=#9426]’s for the first time.

Lips pursed, Twilight looked away. Truth be told she and the others were sure Discord was fine. She figured he was off somewhere wreaking chaos without them, as he put them, “annoying” platitudes of harmony and friendship. Well, it was fine by her if Discord decided to strew about his chaos someplace where innocent ponies wouldn’t be affected; and as far as she knew, Discord hadn’t been spotted anywhere stirring up trouble.

Fluttershy looked at her, eyebrows furrowed. She’d hoped Twilight would know what to do, that she would offer to help. Instead, she was discouraged and made to feel like her anxieties were trivial. She knew had it been any other friend missing, Twilight would have jumped to the map without a pause, tenaciously searching until that pony was found. She knew her friends still held a small aversion towards Discord...at least (you can take this out if you’d like.)they didn’t care for him as much as she did. They didn’t understand him, was all.

I believe that’s all, they were minor boo boos
then again I also make silly mistakes :twilightsheepish: I truly love this sort keep writing! :heart:
~Ara

Oh my gosh! I love this! What you did with Discord and the potion, it had me on the edge of my seat to see what happens now. I can't wait for your next update, thank you so much! ^.^

This is so good, I'm gonna tell all my pony friends to read this!

ONE suggestion. don't feel like you have to stop at 1000 words per chapter. elaborate on their facial expressions and how they are thinking. Add detail the surroundings. I honestly can't wait to read more of this! Fluttercord was running low. I have read almost everything on the sub-page. Thank you for this!!

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Thanks for telling me about this Hannah!! Oath it's good. We've been running dry on these kinda stories

Can't wait 4 next chapter!

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Agreed 100%

Great story!

Needs more detail!

But it only needs more details cause it's already fantastic!

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Needs mores sexy times

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You always say that xD

I hope we get to hear why Discord took the potion to begin with. Maybe because he afraid Fluttershy wouldn't love him back, or that he was afraid of becoming more than just friends?

And, it's a "true love kiss" thing. Don't get me wrong, I like Fluttercord. Just a bit cliche if you ask me.

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hmm, true. But that said, I myself can't help but enjoy it from time to time. That is, when it's done right.

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Oh yes, that is true. Hopefully, longer chapter lengths might help with that.

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Yeah, longer chapters are always good. I can hardly wait to hear what happens! Especially if we get a look into Discord's thinking during all of this.

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Oh yes, Discord's thought process is why I love his character so much.

OMG I’M SO LATE! Soooooooooooo sorry :twilightsheepish: now this is really interesting, I do ship fluttercord, I must see why Discord took the potion in the first place, don’t leave me hanging keep writing!:heart: Word of advice, adding more detail wouldn’t hurt, it’ll make the story even more better (if that’s possible) than it already is!:heart:
~Ara

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While cliche, it is based on an episode of once upon a time where “true loves kiss” is the cure-all to most things. :raritywink:

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It's fine. I'm not against cliches, just feel like they can be a bit more subtlely woven in, you know?

This is absolutely brilliant :pinkiegasp: :pinkiehappy:! It's a long time I have this excited on a story! :heart:

Oh yes! This was definitely worth waiting for. I can already feel my excitement building. And also, Discord you fool! Why did you have to forget Fluttershy?

YAS! Worth the wait. Another great chapter I love this story more more!:heart: Remeber to take your time.
~Ara

So much detail in this one! It's like it gets better and better! X

Gah! >( I feel like I'm at the edge of my seat, what happens now? Will Fluttershy get through to him, will he explain why he did such a thoughtless stupid thing as to forget her? Ooh, I can hardly wait!

YAS ANOTHER GREAT CHAPTER! I love the tension at the end, I NEED more, can’t wait! :pinkiecrazy::heart::derpytongue2:
~Ara

KEEP GOING!!!!!!!!! YOU MUST! YOU MUST!:raritystarry::heart::flutterrage::pinkiegasp:

I loved this, and I'm glad you're not giving up on this story. I wonder if we're going to be seeing Discords pov. Thank you and good luck!

Everything about this story is wonderful! You've put heaps of detail in the newer chapters. You are a brilliant writer now and in the making!

“Oh! Are you a fan? I haven’t done a meet and greet in over a lifetime, my claw-writing is certainly not what it used to be…” He muttered as he dug out a pen and portrait of himself.

That killed me!:rainbowlaugh:
This chapter was great! Don’t worry about time and updating the story, I’m sure your loyal readers can wait, fluttercord is a ship worth living and waiting for!
:heart:
~Ara

Squee! I can't wait to see what'll happen next.

I love it! Keep going please

I’m lateeee, like always. Seems great keep going!
~Ara

I've been waiting for this for so long. I do wish it were longer, but it's still nice to get a little more of the story. I hope we get another chapter sometime soon.

Comment posted by Aida and Ara deleted Nov 2nd, 2019
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