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Broken Wings

love hurts and that's something that Vertigo Featherfall knows all too well.

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Kek lel

Kek lel #1 · Oct 6th, 2018 · · ·

Good vocab, but rather hard to read with the mal-input "u" and "i" in place of "you" and the lack of capitalization for the "i". Remember to capitalize the I when it is alone, and use you in place of just the letter that represents it in texting and informal writing. Good story, nice work.

Solaris Rin Ursa

Solaris Rin Ursa #2 · Oct 6th, 2018 · · ·

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i wrote this in like 4 hours and when i write i free write and then edit everything while im going i thought i got everything but it seems not thnx and i'll fix what i can find

Kek lel

Kek lel #3 · Oct 6th, 2018 · · ·

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Hey, I am just wondering, but can I assist you in your corrections? I need a bit of practice, not gonna lie, but I can quickly remove the vast majority of errors. That being said, I have never corrected a fic on here before, so this would be a new experience for me.

Solaris Rin Ursa

Solaris Rin Ursa #4 · Oct 6th, 2018 · · ·

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i already went through and sorted out all the lower case I's and the few cases of "u" that i forgot to fix if u find anything else then u can point it out.

if i write something else then i'll let u go over it to see if u find anything and if u want u can go through my other story thats complete to check it for stuff