So far, the story seems to have a solid premise, I do have a couple questions however; Is the design for Zero in the cover how Zero will look in the story? Will you be integrating any other Mega Man characters? And will Zero be pure Reploid post-displacement?
Excellent grammar, the use of color though confusing is an incredible detail (personally I find implementing that can be annoying), All we really know sofar is that he knows his way around metal and he's (I want to say stingy) thrifty.
I do so hope to see this continued as I absolutely love Zero. (That and I want to see that Kaiser Knuckle and all of its Street Fighter goodness)
Good attention to detail but not overly technical. What was technical showed character depth without boring exposition of a bit tedious. Still a bit of a Chekhov's Gun moment though, the reader likely doesn't need to know what kind of steel the gear is made from nor will it likely be important. Your character is shrewd, crafty, skeptical, and pragmatic. He sees more than just what's before him. The foreshadowing was a bit blatant, but what can one expect from a displaced fic. I'm looking forward to seeing how you handle the pacing. Your grammar was fine; didn't use any fancy punctuation rules, but nothing was lost either. Dialog was decently scripted. You missed a single space after a closing quotation.
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I look forward to your future work. You have a better baseline than a lot of authors here. Especially if you don't have anyone editing for you. Many people can't edit their own work to save a life.
9213500 A leather thong is just a thin strip of leather fashioned into a loop to secure something. The strap that goes between the toes on flip-flops is called a thong for instance. There is a fine line between constructive and destructive criticism, mind your feet.
Good pacing, will be tracking this
Nice description drags a bit, I would change the light grey tone for the merchant into something else kinda hard to see unless your on night mode
As long as the story doesn’t get to stupid I’ll keep reading
This is good. I like it. Can't wait for more.
Want more great start.
Zero huh, well this will be fun.
Interesting start keep it up
Lets see how this goes. Putting on tracking.
You have my attention
So far, the story seems to have a solid premise, I do have a couple questions however;
Is the design for Zero in the cover how Zero will look in the story? Will you be integrating any other Mega Man characters? And will Zero be pure Reploid post-displacement?
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You'll just have to wait and see... media.giphy.com/media/b7mqjW9f4dVbW/source.gif
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I can wait then, I do like the setup though.
Great story so far
Excellent grammar, the use of color though confusing is an incredible detail (personally I find implementing that can be annoying), All we really know sofar is that he knows his way around metal and he's (I want to say stingy) thrifty.
I do so hope to see this continued as I absolutely love Zero. (That and I want to see that Kaiser Knuckle and all of its Street Fighter goodness)
Good attention to detail but not overly technical. What was technical showed character depth without boring exposition of a bit tedious. Still a bit of a Chekhov's Gun moment though, the reader likely doesn't need to know what kind of steel the gear is made from nor will it likely be important. Your character is shrewd, crafty, skeptical, and pragmatic. He sees more than just what's before him. The foreshadowing was a bit blatant, but what can one expect from a displaced fic. I'm looking forward to seeing how you handle the pacing. Your grammar was fine; didn't use any fancy punctuation rules, but nothing was lost either. Dialog was decently scripted. You missed a single space after a closing quotation.
I look forward to your future work. You have a better baseline than a lot of authors here. Especially if you don't have anyone editing for you. Many people can't edit their own work to save a life.
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A leather thong is just a thin strip of leather fashioned into a loop to secure something. The strap that goes between the toes on flip-flops is called a thong for instance.
There is a fine line between constructive and destructive criticism, mind your feet.