The Doctor, some Ponies, and a MASSIVE amount of Timey Wimey Things going on. Sh*t just got real.
Writen by Me (Sir Robin) and my friend Stormagedden Foal of Doom
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Not sure if purposefully horrible, or in desperate need of a pre-reader. Seriously, I can't read this without getting a migrane. Too many gramatical, punctual, and if I dared to look, probably spelling mistakes, too.
And this makes me sad because I love Doctor Who/MLP crossovers. It makes me very sad indeed.
1013534 It happens to be the need of a pre-reader. We had no access, and this is my friends first fic (My second, technically). We are terribly sorry for your pain suffered through reading this. We truly are. But, also, if you have any ideas to enhance the story writing beyonf that point, feel free to respond.
Well i think what all you need is someone to preread it but other than that its a really good story one for my favorites
1013577
Perfect Comeback.
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I don't wish to be discouraging, but really ... you might want to take your story down and go through it for formatting and readability. It's incredibly hard to make heads or tails of the story flow with the paragraphs so haphazardly assembled. More to the point, you're using a popular theme (Derpy/Ditzy and the Doctor), which means you're probably going to get judged more harshly than if you were using a new idea or cannon concept.
A suggestion would be to look at some of the more popular fics and see how they formatted their story, or ask on the 'help' groups here, asking for the help of an editor. ( The Editors Omnibus also has a lot helpful tips on making your story more readable.)
Good luck!
1013615
Now, Rainbow, my dear, I cannot express my delight
It's abundantly clear
That somewhere out here
Is the next story that will suit you just right!!!!!!
...
Is that an 11th doctor whooves?
Anyways...
Deploy Moustache of Approval
1013631 I'm sorry, but 'taking down stories to revise and edit' is just not my style. THe next chapter will have been edited and revised, with the origanal the same. THAT! is my style. I could care less if you disliked because of grammar and pacing and such. The story is writen one way, and that way will be writen, and revised. Not taken down and revised. I'm sorry to inform you this, If you disagree.
1013635 You my friend have earned yourself a brohoof.
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1013577
Well, lack of a pre-reader's better than the alternative.
Though I do agree with 1013631 over here. Hell, there's a group on this site alone that're made of people who are pre-readers or looking for them. I suggest starting there.
Finally, on the point of making it better beyond the technical difficulties: I'd actually have to read it first. Just sayin'
1013655 Mustache of approval accepted!!! Yes, 11th Doctor is a concept I haven't really seen, and My friend came up with the story like that, so I went along with it.
1013656 you know its against the rules of the site to take down a story and re-upload it under the same name? just in case you didn't know.
1014268 Good to know. No intent to do so.
1013657 I need a new screen......
I've seen worse. But it is a Doctor Story with zombies. Only part I can't figure out is why River Song is there. But
3/5 moustaches.
Right If you just adjust your blocks of texts so they are not blocks of texts then this would be better then some whoofics. The Plots a bit rushed though and there is little room for detail...but Then again I write with TO MUCH detail...
1020652 Well, you'll just have to find out.....
1021252 Thank you for Input!
THE CHAPTERS HAVE BEEN DOUBLED!!!!! I now need an emote of luna sticking out her arm.