You could have avoided the 'turned to stone' and 'alreaddy have knowledge have the displaced/merchant' cliches...

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The reason for the turned to stone was because Angmar landed in old Equestria before Luna turned into Night Mare Moon so it will make the time skip have more since. As for the previous knowledge of the merchant I like that idea since the displaced popularity has gone up, so it makes it easier for people to recognize him, so that is why I did it.

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Yea, but by having it as common knowledge, it will draw unwanted attention to the merchant, especially the police looking for kids/teens/adults who have been reported missing. And of course, it causes issues for his business, preventing him from making a sale when said police/authorities are looking for him.

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True but I remember reading that one author said that what the merchant does is make an exact copy of the displaced person to take their place so no one knows the original has been taken away.

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Ah, that makes sense. Well, just try to stray away from the cliches, also be careful if you choose to have other displaced cross-over into your story

9513747 Those collaborations usually ruin stories, so YES, please be careful

OH here is some good music to go with this

Not bad at all so far. I'm calling either Shimmer or Sparkle releasing him. Hoping for Shimmer actually as so few Displaced ork with her.

Alrighty, let's see how this goes.

*<>* this fic only one chapter in and it already stinks of Caribou ...
Slight disapointment that author relies on YT videos to convey themes in story . . . instead of actually describes in own words ...
~ Eh what do you know ...you're just a truck ...

This I going to be a good fic make more chapter s I'd like to see where this goes

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I used youtube videos for audio purposes only. I love to read the Lord Of The Rings books and have done a lot of research on this. I did this because I wanted the words used to free Angmar would sound evil, corrupted, and dark. That was the only reason for them. I also used them as a reference guide for the way Angmar would sound when he talked nothing else.

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Thanks, man I was actually planning to use the video you suggested at the top in the next chapter.

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I'm not I plan to only include Will as the only other displace to enter since that will be a story of mine I'm planning to write.

(How you will sound at first. Start at 2:30 and go to 3:23.)

3:37

As I walked towards the two princesses, they summoned the Elements of Harmony. I knew that this would affect me due to my alignment. I gave an eerie laugh as both princesses fired the beam at me and it hit. I decided to change my form into that of the black rider and put myself in the battle stance of a nazgûl . Before I was completely ston,ed I told the two princesses this. "If these words are spoken then the Witch King of Angmar shall return. The one who speaks it shall know the strength of the Witch King while their enemy shall know it's fear. So heed these words wisely." I said.

Link doesn't work

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Sorry about that. I have changed the link to the official Lord of the Rings Wiki to be able to see an image of the Nazgul.

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I also redid the link for Angmar's voice.

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*<>* kinda hard to be immersed in one story when LOTR comes in as static drawing attention away . . .
Not trying to bog ya down . just better smoother lanes of approach can be done

Haha I've been waiting for a story like this! (Nazgûl/ringwraith/black rider displaced)

Keep it up
I like

So when might be the next nisolmen

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I'm currently working on the next chapter as we speak

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