Big Mac stood, eyes nearly popping out of her head. "My voice is all funny", she mused aloud, listening to the unbelievably feminine voice she now possessed. The red mare marveled at the feeling of being the opposite sex. The familiar weight between her legs was missing and she had the unusual urge to sway her hips. "How the hay did this happen?" A chuckle reached her ears and she glanced over her shoulder to find Applejack rolling in the grass, full out laughing. She knew now. An April Foal's Day prank. And a good one at that. Big Mac, being a regular prankster, knew a good prank when she saw one and could appreciate it.
"Now, how ta turn this back on 'er...", Big Mac asked herself, placing an amazingly slender hoof on her chin. The ideas came thick and fast. This would be almost too easy...
Applejack couldn't believe how unbelievably easy that had been. And it felt great! She surveyed her new sister and she could feel herself growing uneasier by the second. Big Mac was... well... surprisingly sexy. She had big green eyes with lusciously long eyelashes. She had curves in just the right places and her mane and tail fell exactly where they were supposed to. Her cutie mark was the same but a few sparkles akin to Twilight's surrounded it. AJ found herself nearly drooling over the red beauty in front of her. This was not good.
Big Mac tested a couple of things out, trotting around the tree, wiggling her hips suggestively. Then she pulled one foreleg in front of her chest, back legs outspread, eyes half-lidded, suggestive smile on her lips. Oh yes. This would be fun. Now who to try it out on? And she couldn't very well introduce herself as Big Mac. That wouldn't work at all. Macilicious? No, too close to her real name. After a few moments of deliberation she settled on Red Gala. The name was perfect. And she had found the perfect pony to try this out on. Oh, this would freak her out...
Applejack watched with something like panic as her brother trotted off to an unknown location. "Oh, this was a bad idea. Ah should go tell Twilight to reverse it." Quickly, she galloped off the farm, keeping one eye open for her sister as she went.
A slow knock on her door once again tore Twilight away from her book on Starswirl. "What is it now?" she muttered to herself as she swung open the door. Her jaw dropped. In front of her was a beautiful red mare with great curves and enviously gorgeous mane and tail. Some voice was whispering in her head that she should know who this mare was, but she silenced it quickly, just drinking in the beauty.
"Hello", Red said seductively, savoring the look of awe in Twilight Sparkle's eyes. She knew she couldn't slip into her accent or this would all be over. I'm new in town and I was hoping you could help me get to know other ponies." Red knew she already had her prey hooked and she pulled a pose.
Twilight nearly fainted as she saw the mare, head tilted slightly down and to the side, a small pout on her lips, back legs tucked close together, front legs crossed over each other. "Yeah... yeah I could do that." Dear Celestia, this pony was prettier than Rarity! And Luna knew she had thought of Rarity enough times... "I could most definitely do that."
At that moment, Applejack burst in. "Twiligh-" She froze in shock as she saw the purple unicorn so close to her brother. "What is going on here?" she exclaimed.
The purple unicorn leaped backwards, a blush spreading over her face. "Um, hey, AJ. This is-this is nothing. It's just... um, who are you anyway?" she asked, looking over at Red Gala.
"That would be mah big brother", the country pony said, throwing a glare at the red mare. "And Ah cain't believe you would try this on Twilight!"
Red Gala could barely stop herself from laughing. "I'm Red Gala, thank you very much. And, Applejack, you can't even imagine what I have planned." She smiled mischievously, trotting past the two stunned mares. As she passed, she smacked AJ lightly on the muzzle just for good measure.
"Twilight", Applejack gulped.
"Y-yeah?" Twilight asked, voice wavering.
"Please tell me this spell wears off soon", AJ pleaded.
"I can't do that", Twilight whispered.
"Why not?"
"Because I don't want to lie."
bilbo baggins
I like this story
Poor AJ, she's in for a rough day.
YES. I knew it. I'm not the only one who thinks R63 Big Mac - Er, Red Gala is a cute pony. In the beginning of the chapter, I noticed "How they hay did this happen?" Might wanna get rid of the "y" at the end of "The".
I eagerly await more of this... To be honest, I eagerly await more of Red Gala. Keep up the good work.
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You have no idea.
And to all of you who guessed the Rule 63, good job! And, sorry, there will be no sex with Rainbow Dash. This IS rated everyone after all.
And so...IT BEGINS!
1007708
Um, yeah, I AM considering changing that.
It took m five minutes of staring at the picture to realize hes a and im read the description ohh this is going to be juicy
Stupid nookIt took m five minutes of staring at the picture to realize hes a and im read the description ohh this is going to be juicy
AJ, what have you done? Do you not know what you have unleashed upon the world?
Hmm, okay why would Twilight not recognize her own spell? Things seem to happen a little too fast for my liking. Maybe next chapter will be an improvement.
And I still haven't found my popcorn. Did you take it Pinkie?
Pinkie: No
Me: GAH!! Holy shit, Pinkie!
Big Mac genre savvy. It would seem he knows who has a weakness for mares judging from this. Personally, Spike should see this and lets watch the hilarity spread. For that matter, unexpected visit from Blueblood comes to mind.
ummm.....he's taking it rather well. I mean he just finds out he swapped genders and the first thing he thinks of is who to show it off to? If I were suddenly turned into a girl I would probably panic for a few hours, cry and mourn my lost "manhood". Big Mac does none of that! He just thinks "nice prank sis! you really got me there!" Come on at least show a little rage, anger, anything! You interested me at the first chapter but lost me on the second
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... Go on.
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oh joy 63'ed Big Mac
this gun b gud
Big Mac-ahem, Red Gala, I hope 63 is your favorite number. You're going to be hearing a LOT about it.
1008043
Big Mac did feel something.
Trollish.
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this is going to be hilarious
wow ok you need to slow down a bit. sorry it all happened to fast you need a proofreader oh i'm sorry for the negative comment but here come a good one the story line is a good one i still think this is going to be interesting
1007665
What's Rule 63?
This will be fun to see what she has in store for us. I still wonder if Rainbow Dash is going to try and hit that
1009899 Rule 63 is Gender change.
1009899
Internet rule 63: If there is a male character a female version of that character must be made, the only exception to this rule is if the male in question is androganyous enough that the female version would look like the male version or the female version has not been created.
Oh Mac, you're such a tease! I can't wait to find out what happens next. Don't keep me waiting too long!
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He he. Sorry, I don't have one. BUT if things are pointed out in the comments, I do go back and fix them.
1010557
What exactly do proofreaders do? I mean, besides the obvious.
AWESOME job
I've said it before, and I'll say it again (and possibly many more times in the future), if ever there was a time to make a statement regarding the current reality of excrement, that time is now:
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...Considering that she is in fact a colt-turned-mare, I'm willing to believe that Red Gala is a lesbian here.
But this is a bit much. Shouldn't there be some form of panic first?
I could say I don't enjoy this story...but that would be LYING!
1011615
Okay, I'm working on a new chapter right now. I'll pm it to you when I'm done.
1011643
Okay. I'll send it when I'm done. Or I'll just copy and pase it into a pm.
1011668
I know. I wouldn't publish it until you'd corrected it.
1011688
Of course.
Whoa, hold on one second... are you trying to tell me that in order for Big Mac, a stallion, to seduce a mare, he must first... become a mare?
...
Hmm... yeah, that's how love works. Nothing wrong here.
Just one other thing though... HOW THE HELL DOES THEIR RACE PROCREATE OR THRIVE!?!?
I don't know if this concept is absolutely infuriating or incredibly hilarious...
I woulda thunk Big Macintosh would have tried this out on somepony like Caramel or Pokey Pierce. Y'know, a DUDE.
I think that portraying the Mane Six as gay or whatever has become pretty tiring. It's becoming rarer and rarer to see any of it done convincingly or well.
By the by, this story could use some improvement:
1) Sentence and paragraph structure seem wonky to me. The story moves at a bizarre pace and jumps from perspective to perspective, without throwing in anything interesting to read.
2) Twi casts a transformation spell on Big Mac, OK. With ya so far. Turns him into a girl. All right, funny. But you forgot a few things:
a) Why does Twi do this? How did AJ rope her into it? Simply asking Twi to change Big Mac's sex isn't believable. Try harder.
b) Big Macintosh waking up to find himself a herself somehow doesn't freak him out? Dude, that would freak out anyone. His behavior isn't believable. Heck, his whole personality in this story is so unlike what we already know about him. He'd probably be the object of many pranks but not a prankster himself.
c) How does Twilight turn BM into a girl, then leave and forget what BM looks like as a girl, then fall in love with a Red Gala she already recognizes BECAUSE SHE WAS THE ONE WHO CAST THE SPELL? *head go boom*
3) Why is Big Macintosh a prankster? This would be more believable if it were Rainbow Dash or Pinkie Pie, although their pranks never go that far unless it was by accident.
4) If Twilight can't reverse the spell or it doesn't wear off, why did she cast it? That's unusually irresponsible of her. You don't concoct a poison and then not work on a suitable antidote before testing it, do you?
You know how you could fix all these problems?
Step 1: Have RD and PP play a prank on AJ that goes too far and ends up trashing Twilight's library as well. (NOTE: Leave what prank was up to reader's imagination. Open up on end result.)
Step 2: AJ becomes so angry at RD and PP that she demands some kind of punishment. Twilight says that this kind of judgment is not theirs to make. Suddenly, she finds that, horror of horrors, the wreckage has left all of her books out of alphabetical order! (Remember, comedy is in effect.) So she agrees with AJ and they discuss what needs to be done.
Step 3: RD and PP have gone into hiding, but Twi finds them and casts a spell on them. (NOTE: This spell needs to be temporary. Have it last for maybe a day.)
RD and PP become Blitz and Bubble. Hilarity ensues.
And this would be more believable and entertaining a story.
As it is, this story sucks. The writing is messy, the plot is trite and rife with plot holes, and the characters just don't act like the characters we know from the show. Try harder next time!
Wow, Big Mac's really getting into it...
And for some reason, he's acting a lot like how I imagine I would act if I suddenly turned in to a female, though admittedly with a lot less shouting.
....
I meant embracing it right off the bat and having fun with it, not seducing my lesbian friends.
-Delta-
Probably literally.
*During one of the times Twilight's 'thinking' about Rarity*
"Twilight! I couldn't see you during the day, so I visited your dreams! How a..."
This isn't what it looks like!
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*leaves*
Please don't tell Celestia!!
... I need help if I thought of that.
Nice story so far, but there's a minor thing you may want to edit.
You're missing a quotation mark at the beginning.