We all know who the Rainbooms are. They're the seven girls at school who formed an awesome band, but more importantly, they all have magic super powers that they use to fight magic evils. But what if they used their powers for... something else?
I like this chapter a lot. (Also, I apologize if my last comment was overly harsh-sounding. It's something I need to work on.)
One question, though. Is Spike really that young? Spike the dragon may be a baby (although he certainly acts older than that), but I'm not sure Spike the dog is still a puppy -- dogs grow up pretty fast in human years (like 12-18 months for adulthood, and only 6 months for puberty). It's hard to believe that he's too young to learn about sex -- unless the actual problem is that he can't be trusted to keep secrets from the rest of Twilight's family...
(Also, Spike isn't the only sentient dog; all dogs are sentient. Spike is the only sapient dog.
Of course, it's possible the protagonist wouldn't know that, but Twilight would certainly have corrected him at some point if he didn't.)
9132795 That's a fair point, but personally, I never really thought that science and logic ever had that much of a place in this franchise, especially with different writers always coming, going, and changing the rules around.
I pretty much just thought, "Spike was always portrayed as a child, so that's how I'll write him, too." And that's all that I really thought about.
As for the whole sentient/sapient thing, that's a really good point, so I actually changed that. So, thanks for the correction!
This was an OK chapter, although i was expecting things to get a bit more "wild" from the way it was mentioned in the previous chapter but i guess it was just my imagination going crazy and hyping myself up. But it wasnt bad, in fact i think it was a very creative take on how Twilight would use her powers for a situation like this. So i'd say job well done.
I admire your imagination. If Twilight was ever coming on to me (which I dream of :D) I would love it to be that way. :D Simply amazing.
(No further critique, because it is straight up porn. My previous comment regarding the descriptions still apply) Although, one afterthrought: You managed to get Twilight's character across perfectly, even if it is just straight up porn. The is meticulous, straight forward, analytic and science-y. Perfect Twilight.
DAYUM.
Now that's fucking hot.
I like this chapter a lot. (Also, I apologize if my last comment was overly harsh-sounding. It's something I need to work on.)
One question, though. Is Spike really that young? Spike the dragon may be a baby (although he certainly acts older than that), but I'm not sure Spike the dog is still a puppy -- dogs grow up pretty fast in human years (like 12-18 months for adulthood, and only 6 months for puberty). It's hard to believe that he's too young to learn about sex -- unless the actual problem is that he can't be trusted to keep secrets from the rest of Twilight's family...
(Also, Spike isn't the only sentient dog; all dogs are sentient. Spike is the only sapient dog.
Of course, it's possible the protagonist wouldn't know that, but Twilight would certainly have corrected him at some point if he didn't.)
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That's a fair point, but personally, I never really thought that science and logic ever had that much of a place in this franchise, especially with different writers always coming, going, and changing the rules around.
I pretty much just thought, "Spike was always portrayed as a child, so that's how I'll write him, too." And that's all that I really thought about.
As for the whole sentient/sapient thing, that's a really good point, so I actually changed that. So, thanks for the correction!
This was an OK chapter, although i was expecting things to get a bit more "wild" from the way it was mentioned in the previous chapter but i guess it was just my imagination going crazy and hyping myself up. But it wasnt bad, in fact i think it was a very creative take on how Twilight would use her powers for a situation like this.
So i'd say job well done.
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I think it's less "Spike is really that young" and more "Twilight perceives Spike as being that young", which is the more significant aspect.
I have read many erotic stories featuring Twilight Sparkle. But, this one really tops them all.
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Thanks!
Well... fuck. :D
I admire your imagination. If Twilight was ever coming on to me (which I dream of :D) I would love it to be that way. :D
Simply amazing.
(No further critique, because it is straight up porn. My previous comment regarding the descriptions still apply)
Although, one afterthrought: You managed to get Twilight's character across perfectly, even if it is just straight up porn. The is meticulous, straight forward, analytic and science-y. Perfect Twilight.
Also, I wanna be wrapped in her wings.