After Luke fon Fabre had freed Lorelei, he was certain that he would die from the separation of his fonons. It seems that fate would choose a completely unexpected path for our hero. Luke wakes up in a mysterious forest, and eventually stumbles upon the town of Ponyville.
Author's Note: This is the first time I am uploading a fic on a chapter update basis, so the update schedule could get a little wibbly wobbly.
Legal disclaimer: I do not own any of the characters presented in this fan fiction. Tales of the Abyss is owned by Namco and My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic is owned by Hasbro.
Chapters (21)
Well, from the description, looks like you're going for an explanation of the in-between time of the final battle and the ending scene... Meh, sounds legit! xD I'll add more after reading the chapter. I'm at least intrigued...
Okay, read it, and... I mean, it SEEMS like it could have potential, but it was WAY too rushed. I mean, Twilight sees Luke and is just totally fine? Luke just accepts pretty much everything as it comes? Not that you want thousands of words about them freaking out, but that was rather... bland. This didn't read like a story, it was more of a 'Let's find a way to get from point A to point B', which is Luke getting to Equestria and finding some of the mane six. It needs quite a bit of work IMO, but at least your grammar wasn't HORRIBLE. (Might have missed a bit of it since it's 2:30 here, but whatever.)
I'll follow for now, but it's not good enough IMO for a rating yet. I'll give you a chance to make it better with the next chapter, or a re-write, or whatever.
love the game, love the show.
this is a little rushed but i cant wait to see more of it.
You've made my day all the brighter! This is my favorite game and you've combined it with my favorite show...I teem happiness now
1002700 I understand that the story is a bit rushed, but this is with good reason. For starters, this fic is going to span the time of the entire year that Luke was missing after the destruction of Eldrant. Secondly, Luke was kinda forced to go along with Twilight because he knew all too well how dangerous forests can be at night (example: Tataroo Valley). I understand that my writing style definetly needs improvement, so I appreciate your critique nonetheless.
1003769 Glad to see you like the concept! I understand it's a little rushed, but this is going to be taking place during the year Luke was gone, so it's going to take a while.
getting even better keep it up.
The latest chapter was kinda short, but fear not my friends! Thar be twists on the horizon!
I shall read more of this. Keep up the good work, friend
oh man i hope you don't quit half way through.
this just keeps getting better.
1042667 Don't worry, I have no intention of just dropping it. It may get slower updates once my schedule starts getting busy, but I assure you, this won't stop till it's done!
Hehehe, I always love incentive moments
Hehehe, nice
I've only seen playthroughs of this game, wanting to play it so badly. I can't wait to see Sync step into battle.
Just a heads up: I know this chapter took longer than usual, and it's still kinda short, but the reasons for that are the improved writing style I'm using, and school. I do assure you this: the next chapter will be much longer, and questions will finally be answered.
Your patience is appreciated, and I hope you like where I take this.
I see what you did there.
I think the god general battle theme would be better here.
And I like this story! How do you only have 12likes?
1229306 probably has to do with the fact more recognizable crossovers get more views. I'm not sure how many people on FiMFiction have actually played Abyss, so that could be a factor.
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Well that's a shame. ToA was a damn good game! I will keep reading this though!
1227701Looks like Anise Tatlin has found another victim for her sarcasm.
New chapter is shorter than I hoped, but I promise the next will answer most of your questions.
Alrighty then. Another good chapter!
What if I don't have questions? wait a minute that's a question. Never mind.
Hmm...I wonder if Luke would manage to master a new Arte based on the aspect of Harmony, or six arts based on the elements...hmmm
Oh well. Another good chapter!
I'm a bit surprised there haven't been many comments regarding the latest bombshell.
Also, to whoever finds the Tales of Symphonia reference in Hidden Truths gets a cookie.
I believe the TOS reference has to do with Genis's title [I HATE GELS!!!]
1415012 Correct!
Have a batch of Genis' home made cookies! *HP and TP restored*
1415172 I love cookies Thanks
Somehow, I'm starting to imagine funny skits in the later chapters
I wonder if anyone else will appear in Equestria?
1489551 Just the ones I have already mentioned. Though I may do some chapters from the viewpoints of Luke's friends while he was gone.
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Oh well. Still wonder what they would think of Anise.
Heads up everyone. We're switching over to a new perspective next chapter. This will become a regular thing during the story, but not so much that it will ruin the pacing.
Oh, Rainbow Dash...You're a prime example on how most people flirt for the money
Ah, an interlude chapter...Things might get interesting from here on out.
Peony is best Emperor.
1608585 I'm sure he and Celestia would get along great!
A Blazblue reference. Clever
1677050 What can I say? I love BlazBlue. Can't wait for Chrono Phantasma.
This is funny because I plan on watching an episode of Doctor Who after this
Just letting you all know that I'll try and get a new chapter up before Christmas. Writing will likely be on a standstill once the holiday break starts, but I'll resume as soon as I can.
I can't help but feel that the mare known as Briggs Wall is a subtle FMA Brotherhood reference. As for Asch's side of the story, I wonder how he'll cope with the Doctor's antics
1899532 Correct! Briggs is my little reference to Olivier Mira Armstrong.
The Dark Wings are awesome characters.
Love how the Doctor references 'The Impossible Planet' and the one episode where he meets William Shakespeare with Martha
Keep up the good work! I've yet to post chapters myself.
I know the feel on working several stories and having update troubles. This was a good chapter, by the way
Oh yeah, here come the action! And, the music is very fitting to boot.
C&C:
"Twi, you've been quite this whole time. Are you feelin' okay?"
> Replace ‘quite’ with ‘quiet’.
I always hate those fights where more characters spawn while your fighting the toughest bosses
Can't help but feel sorry for Arietta, though
Well, it seems more troubles have been added to an already troublesome situation to began with. Not sure what to say further on this, so I just kick back and wait for more info.
C&Cs:
...and used her knowledge in first aid to help her friendw whenever they got hurt.
> Correction: ‘friends’.
When they came back to me their bark was fractured, and their leaves were tattered.
> Comma after ‘me’.
Poor Arietta. I'm never a fan of those bosses who rely on lesser opponents in battle that constantly respawn.
Kurt Bessel in ToGf is a firm example
...Then again, without his constantly-respawning troops, he is a BITCH to kill
Oh crap. I wonder if Discord will play the role of trolling anti-hero the moment he's free. Kinda like Q or Deadpool.
Interesting, so Thunder Crash accidentally pulled off an arte, without meaning to. So, that mean that the MLP world is slowly getting some Tales arte. Can't wait to see if anyone else in the MLP-verse will learn an arte. And, it would figured that Discord would soon play a hand in this...heh, another thing to look forward to.
C&Cs:
...but the truly devastating part was when largo...
> Capitalize ‘largo’.
Asch, who had finished healing himself with his arte was entirely confused.
> Comma after ‘arte’.
You're original is probably rolling in his grave as we speak.
> Replace “You’re” with “Your”.
...attention to Largo."We need to get you out of here. We've already bought enough time, so let's go!"
> Need to add a space.
Instant Correction: ‘...eager to finally bring an end to the chaos brought about by Van Grants.’
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