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DemonicWolf300
I’m just a guy who loves stories, games and memes (always the memes)
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I think I just took a sledgehammer right in the “Nope” button.
9051273
Same
Alright, let's see what this has to offer me.
Oh god I regret this already. Just seems like another edgy HiE fic, fantastic. At the very least there was some effort put into the backstory, even if orphan with abusive foster family is a little too much on the "PLEASE SYMPATHISE I HAD A BAD CHILDHOOD" way of building a character. Might as well not be there for all the impact it had on Adam, since he preaches honor and protection after killing his abusive caretakers in cold blood.
Like I dunno, does it seem like "Honorable knight" and "Cold blooded psychopath" should be in the same character? I don't.
Not even getting into the whole "Son of Celestia or Luna" thing because that kind of wish fufilment speaks for itself and never really goes anywhere. Also a human who has a horse for their mother. Run that by me again and tell me if that makes any sense, because it doesn't from my end.
Oh boy.
9051501
Thanks for the feedback but hey I’m new to writing. I’m just writing the ideas I have, plus you will find out how celestia is actually his mother in later chapters. If you don’t want to read it that is fine but just to let you know I am writing this story how I want to, if people don’t like it that is their problem not mine.
9051294
Well no need for the rudeness but if you don’t enjoy the story don’t read it. It’s as simple as that.
Why is it that every knight in every story is God's gift to the earth?
Why can't there be a knight that is just a somewhat ordinary person, but is good at swinging a sharp stick around them?
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#Wardenisbestgirl
No one called them "greatswords" in the middle ages, they were just called swords.
9051678
Eh sounds better as greatsword
This fic is so much YES! that I am in yes overload, keep at it
9051755
Thanks! Will do I plan on updating as soon as I can!
9051559
Did you seriously just spoil your own story's twist in the first page of comments?
Seems I have a stalker that likes to down vote my comments. Don't know if I should feel honoured or not
9051862
Who said i as spoiling it? Maybe I was lying
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9051864 Or maybe someone saw your comment and didn’t like it. It’s not that deep, fam.
9051948
It's been like this over five stories and 13 different Comments, Doesn't seem to matter the comment content either.
Oh dear...
The grammar and spelling is decent, but there's a load of fast paced exposition, not to mention the Gary Stu MC with a tragic backstory to match... Y'know what, just watch this video:
In fact, just watch all of this guy's videos. It will help you know what not to do when writing a story.
9052172
Yeah I was trying my best not to make him a Gary but it proves to be a lot harder than you think. But thanks for the tip I’ll have a look at the video when I can.
9052172
Would it be Gary Stu if he is god-like in only one area but struggles in others? Kind of like picking a Dump Stat in an RPG I guess?
9052111 I don’t know. Maybe you just tend to leave consistently shitty comments on other’s stories.
9052197
Go look for some of my Comments then come back and try to say that with a strait face. I just think it's a Troll if I am honest.
9052218 I’m not perusing the whole of FIMFiction on the off chance I’ll find one of the comments you left on a story, yet alone all thirteen.
9052228
It's called a Favorites list for a reason :P
But really at this point I think it's just one of those Random Trolls who get their Jingles off doing Random down votes on the site
It's more of an Honor being worth the Time if I am honest and it doesn't really bother me all that much, just gives me my daily laugh
Jesus, you goyim are getting worked. This is obviously a trollfic.
9052307
What do you mean by that? I’m literally just writing a story that has popped up from my mind
9052380
The story didn't give it away; it was your name. Check out Windlife. You need to be more subtle if this is your thing.
This is shit is subpar at best. I recommend learning about common clichés and how to avoid them as well as developing your writing style to an appropriate level.
Just work on it more.
9052603
Second time writing in general so I’m learning as I go.
9052641
If I had any advice, I'd say consider a character's backstory, and think of something slightly more original than "my parents sucked, they abused me, I killed them, now I kill for a living, and oh, btw, my real mother is some god in another dimension"
I myself am no good at writing, but considering what a character is like is one of the most important things for a story, or else you get bland boring or OP characters that nobody in the story should care about, or cares about way too much.
A middle ground is important, for a beginner I'd perhaps recommend doing one shots with standard run of the mill characters that you don't really have to consider too much, (just think of a name, and how they'd react when around others, and that's about it). Once you have experience, put it to work on something like this.
More stuff to consider is spelling, read some stuff made by professionals, and look at how they structure their paragraphs. Or just looks at the "How to start writing" guide here on fimfiction, that'd probably help too.
Best I can say is keep reading and see how it develops, after five chapters if you don't like it then stop reading.
I have seen Fics start out Trashy and get really good after the first five chapters so you never know.
Interesting concept. And fairly well designed. Can't wait to read more.
9054521
Well sorry to tell you but you are gonna have to wait for another week or so before the next chapter. I’m gonna be on holiday during that time. But I’ll be working on it while I’m away so I’ll have it up as soon as I can :)
I really like how this is going so far I just hope it doesn't ture too dark
9052178
That's just not true.
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It has been for me so far since I am inexperienced when comes to writing still but I’m learning as I go.
Got to love critics that don't have a single story to their name. Instant experts they are. All they really are is armchair quarterbacks who try to tear down someone who tried to do their best.
I hope this gets updated
edit
because some story the creaters say its now on Hiatus but 5-7 years later no update
so I hope it whont be cansuled or never updated becus I like this story to me its epic
enywase I hope you have a good day and year
9253980
Don’t worry I will update it again soon, but I want to at least get some solid character designs in my project before I continue.
9258776
what is it about
9258842
It’s a game hopeful game/comic idea that I won’t go into detail about.
9283887
Memes, gotta love em.
hey its alive
9283942
Damn right it is
About bloody time! This was a pretty interesting story, and I was getting worried!
9284007
Yeah sorry about that I was busy. I’ll try update as much as possible!
Solid start so far! Looks like things are getting interesting. How will our fair knight react to this? Can't wait to find out!
IT'S ALIVE PRAISE BE TO FAN FICTION JESUS FOR HE HAS GIVEN US A MIRACLE!!!!