Before y'all complain: Blue Wings chapter is written. I am simply awaiting on the artist (the second, in fact. The first one was going to, but real life conspired against him to give him tons of work at his job, and he's been unable to do anything. But I've found an excellent substitute, which I think might actually look even better!

This was an idea that was caused by someone typo-ing "moodswing". The term "moodwing" seemed an obvious pegasus-term, and I let things go from there.

I want to thank Macdjord, my prereader, who at this point is practically a co-author. Certainly a brainstormer extraordinaire!

edit:

The cover art for this is... somewhat misleading. Contains appledash, but isn't the main focus.

If anyone feels up to the task of making a better cover art... please do?

>>10308151030815

Looks interesting, *klicks read later*

EDIT:

Hahaha Just read the story! genius *claps*

Props to you Tchern! I loved the humor in this story

(One thing though, I'm kinda against the AppleDash thing, but that's more something personal )

What did Princess Luna do?

And yes, I found this quite great. Quite a lot of thought had to have gone into this, and it's obvious.

Just like Twilight, too, to not understand the implications of what she's doing.

Ok, gave it a read.  Pretty good, believable, light-hearted and amusing.  Although the whole 'Secret to everyone' thing is a bit off, it doesn't detract from the short story as it is.

>>10338671033867

Well, not so much "secret to everyone" as "not common knowledge to non-pegasi"

Love it, but I note the story isn't marked as "complete..."

Hoping that means there's going to be more!  The story is well written, it's almost like an episode in and of itself (if HUB could get away with broadcasting it).  And that bit at the end almost had me in stitches

You're getting a thumbs up and an addition to my favorites list!

>>10339461033946

Woops! It is complete, actually! I gotta change that :x

Soooo Twilight, lol. Guess it's her horn that keeps giving her away. And yay for Derpy/Ditzy!

Derpy is adorable in this story.

I think a few things from this have wormed their way into my headcanon...

I really enjoyed this. You obviously put a lot of thought and creativity into this story and it shows. I wonder how Fluttershy is going to be around Twilight since the librarian didn't realize she'd been noticed. You really hit the nail on the head for Twilight's adorkableness with this. With heaps of physical and emotional comedy, tossed with interesting world building, and you made a very interesting and amusing fic. The end punchline was pretty good, but after the earlier revelation, it didn't feel like it had as much impact.

Anywho, well done and thanks for sharing this with us!

tchero is bestest and most amazingness author

That.  Was.  Awesome.  

Seriously, this was an amazing story!   I had to pause my reading a few times, since I was laughing too hard to focus.    Not only was the story hilarious and well-written, but you it's clear you put a whole lot of thought and effort into it.  The Mood Wings portions read like an actual scholarly work, and were very detailed and analytical.  Overall, not only was this story awesome, but it was very impressive, and an excellent testament to your ability as a writer and a storyteller!  Good job, dude!  

Also, I now have to pay more attention when writing/describing pegasi characters, and try to mention their wing-language as much as I do their body-language.  Perhaps I should go back and tweak a few of my prior works, as well.  Hmmm.  

This totally deserves a sequel... c'mon you can do eet!

I really liked this story and there were much lols to be had. I also like the inclusion of Big McLargeHooves Roid Rage and Derpy's save. And I loved the fact that Rainbow lept to the right conclusion while still being completely wrong.

you get 15 's out of 5

:Edit: also if you write a sequel I want Twi to bring what ever she just read to Celestia's attention, if only to see 'Tia be all nonchalant about it.

A well written story! Your characterization was excellent, and I especially liked how you used Appledash for a narrative purpose as opposed to just throwing them together. Now, if you'll excuse me, my inner fanboy has something to say: MOAR DERPY/TWILIGHT PLOX

Twilight really needs to learn to finish the body of existing research before attempting to do her own studies

Hmm...

Twerpy? Nah.

Derkle? ...NO.

Sparky? Eeeeehhhh....

Delight.

Love it. Have a mustache . Although now I'm curious: what DID Luna do? Any hints?

This was an incredible one-off. I laughed so hard during 'Chapter 11: Standing at Attention - Arousal' and at the end with Celestia and Luna! Good job!

That was HILARIOUS!! Not only was it a good story, but for a good few minutes I just couldn't stop laughing.  javascript:smilie('');

You get a 2 thumbs up

Haha. Well, that was a fun read indeed. I will have to re read it again for the enjoyment of it. Even though I am a Extremist Twidash fan. The format and characterizations were excellent. 'Mood Wings' was a great plot device. I kinda wish for a sequel.

ahahaha very good oneshot ! i love it !

This was a wonderful interlude between chapters of Blue Wings and a wonderful story just to be read by itself. The ending though with Celestia and Luna though has me curious as to what Celestia has to teach about dating. Could it be a hint of another one shot/story in the same vein as Mood Wings?

>>10349591034959

Not particularly. It just seems like the type of reaction Celestia might have

>Implied DerpLight

>Complete story

>No sequel

ihateyou

I learn so much from these stories.

I was quite entertained. :)

Awesome story! It was funny and sweet, and your writing of the "technical" text was still entertaining (something a lot of authors have trouble with.) Great job!

Very funny though Derpy and Twilight are an odd Pairing but still funny.

This was very good. And when i finally cam to the end I saw your username and my mind went in this direction "So that's why it was so good!"

An excellent story. Very funny, and everyone stayed well in character.

This is fucking awesome!

Can't believe it took me 2 hours to plow through those 9000 words when proofreading it for you

I'll restate my earlier statement, I like the story

Holy shit that was funny. Right after the interaction with Soarin, I figured it out. Oh goodness, my cheeks ache from smiling and laughing so hard. And it's a good thing Fluttershy didn't realize Twi was looking at her wings. She would have had a conniption, bleated like a goat, and fallen over. And I loved the interaction with Derpy, that just seems like it'd go down the path of really sweet.

I was so interested.

I loved it.

Until I reached AppleDash.

WHY CAN I NOT FIND A SINGLE STRAIGHT FIC.

Never once.

EVER.

Except for platinum crown, but that sucked.

>>10354261035426

Because no stallion in FIM is as interesting as the mane 6!

Nice, would like a sequel.

Oh, please, PLEASE, write a sequel to this story.  You've successfully left enough unsaid to be able to do so rather easily!  I loved this story.  Please don't let it end there!!!

Really great story. I expected no less from you.

Congratulations on the feature box.

I would suggest submitting it to EqD, if you haven't already, as I don't think I've ever read something like this before with Twilight. Hell, I think it's worthy of a feature there, but then again, I'm not exactly unbiased.

>>10354641035464

I

WILL

KILL

YOU

IN

YOUR

SLEEP...

And then spawn kill you multiple times...

>>10355561035556

It's already been submitted, there's probably a fairly lengthy queue. I'm just shocked I've gotten feature box even without it!

awesome. this is so like twilight

...

So is there going to be a sequel or is this a one shot?

>>10357011035701

As far as I'm concerned, I see this more as a one shot. Much more focus on the wings in a continuation would be somewhat too heavy handed, I think.

But if I can think of a good storyline for a sequel... well, it's anyone's guess.

Forget, moon sun and stars, You should start reading "Muffin Marvel, the guide to all things Muffin!"

>>10308151030815

I'm unashamedly stealing some of the expressions for my head-canon. With your permission? please?

...I can?

WOOHOO!!!

Oh good heavens!  I'm laughing so hard my sides are hurting!

And FYI?  I have a secret love of Derpy/Twi pairings

>>10357491035749

Please do! :D

Please! Please say there will be a sequal!

This is too good a lead-in to a good TwiDerp possibility!

I loved this. Absolutely loved it. The book chapters were really well-written and interesting, the story was funny, and Derpy was so cute. I'd love to see a sequel that explores "DeLight."

Also, would you mind if I used some of the ideas in this fic in my own stories? The wing language you've detailed could be used as a guide for other writers.

>>10357891035789

Please do! I was secretly hoping people might want to do this, but the reaction this has gotten is surprising even me!

You shouldn't be surprised, this is a great story.

I've read a few fics that mentioned brushing the wings over another pony's side as an affectionate/flirtatious gesture, and you interpreted it interestingly here. I'm definitely going to use that!

>>10358261035826

I must admit the wingtip brushing was an idea from one of Applejinx's stories, although slightly different, I think. The rest I believe I just pulled out of my ass :D

Great story, I always love it when other ways of narrative are worked into stories i.e., letters or in your case a book.

Keep up the good work!

An enjoyable bit of pegasus sociology, combined with a lovely dollop of social awkwardness. A most enjoyable read all around. Also, kudos for the uncommon pairing.

Hmm... Whether or not to read this story despite the fact that wingboner jokes generally kind of annoy me, and I don't believe they're a real thing, but rather something the fandom just made up that doesn't really make sense...

Eh, I'll probably just disregard believability for the sake of comedy and take a look anyway. It is just a one-shot, after all.

Absolutely, positively loved this. Good job!

Oh this was just /awesome/

I thought this was going to have Twilight figuring out what the pegasi around town were thinking, specifically that Rainbow was into Applejack, but this is awesome too. And oddly, I can totallly see Twilight as being so eager to apply what she's learned to start applying it before she's finished learning it...because, well, a lot of people do that.

But the best part of this was the "Delight"ful pairing. (Thank you, >>10348701034870 , for that, btw)

Though, whatever Luna did, I'm sure it can't top Celestia spelling out "[the head of the canterlot's astrology division] sucks!" In the stars during Luna's banishment in My Little Alicorn.

Now I'm once again finding myself wanting more Derpy romance, but no one seems to want to write it...at least not as a main pairing in a story.

This story sucks!

...Is what I would say if this story wasn't totally awesome!

"wingboner", Dude i saw this coming from the moment i had readen the "What ever it is you tell little about the story at the beginning where you see the differen chapter"( http://www.fimfiction.net/story/41313/Mood-Wings )--> meaning what was text on this bage. But other than that this was a rather good fictional story. And What DID Princess Luna Do ?

>>10359241035924

You definitely should. I dislike the wingboner meme but this is not really centred on that concept. And yes, the comedy is just the right tone to avoid making any of it gratuitus.

You need to do another story,  like this, with 'Moon, Sun, and Stars: A History of Equestrian Cosmology’. I'm curious about this...

My rating for this fic: 4/5 grins.

First the things I think could have been better: I would have liked more of this! However, I understand why you chose to limit it to a one-shot. Secondly, while the Appledash shipping was present for a well-placed reason, the Derplight shiptease felt slightly superfluous. Seeing as it wasn't going to go anywhere, at least within the confines of this story, I wonder if it could have been cut or replaced.

Next the fangasming and praise. I love how you struck out from explicit canon in a way that is consistent with canoncial moodwing expressions, and codifies and extends it in a framework that doesn't seem artificial. The scientific tet was convincing in its construction, although for perfectly ggood reasons it was shorter than an actual printed book would likely turn out to be. The use of language seems familiar from the scientific artivles I have read. Oh, and I caught on instantly to what Twilight was implying when she ogled the wings... the overused term 'adorkable' comes to mind.

I really liked how the book felt like a proper scientific observation study. Very well written.

Hahaha! Great story! What did Princess Luna do?

Updating head_canon.exe

Full Pegasai body language guide found

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What did Princess Luna do? Well, I can't tell you... but I will note that moon-Goddesses have traditionally been associated with fertility~

-- Mac, the Co-Author

>>10348701034870

I like Twerpy, personally, or just Twerp. Or perhaps Twitzy.

This story was amazing, and the list of terms for wingboners was hysterical. Headcanon enhanced.

Liked, favorited, watched. I look forward to seeing more from you.

So the dawn of a new era begins!

Congratulations friend, thou hast head-canonized the general public!

Good luck with writing, I can tell you're going to be good at it.

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Great story, but I'm not really into shipping. But when Twilight figured out what message she'd been sending.... BWAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHA Favorite for sure!

Sooo... and huh? Interesting pairing to say the least.

Sequeeeeeeeeeeeel. please?

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Very enjoyable and comical, yet still written with care and thought. Also...daaaaaawwwwwwwww...for Derpy/Ditzy

Entertaining and informative, with a generous helping of adorkable Twilight and a twist of Derpy shipping!

I love this fic, and I might be referencing it for ideas vis-a-vis pegasus expressiveness.

God this was so freaking awesome. You are amazing and you should feel amazing.

A short story from an RP board I was involved in.

Star giggled and said, "There's no reason to be embarrassed. After all, it's perfectly fine to have a little fun with your kids every now and then, and it's not like we're bothering anypony." She picked a doughnut out of the small box that had been delivered to them and tore it in half with Telekinesis, before stuffing it unceremoniously in her glass of milk. Taking a bite of the other half and eyeing the massive order of muffins, she couldn't help but wonder how it was that Fireflare kept her figure. Even with her daily exercises, the pegasus should have been huge by now. Some mares had all the luck.

After a few moments spent being idly jealous of her wife's metabolism, Star fished a small chunk of milk-sodden doughnut out of her glass, shook off the excess liquid, and carefully fed it to Moonshine, watching for signs of choking. The colt gummed the cold, sweet treat without incident, letting the majority of the milk run out of his mouth messily before swallowing the masticated lump of sugary bread and smiling beatifically. He liked that, whatever it was.

His mother chuckled and mopped his face with a napkin, before grabbing a bit more doughnut-pudding and feeding it to him. She also chose another of the sweet treats for herself, taking a bite and savoring the slightly-salty flavor of sugar and fat. Another pang of jealously struck her regarding Fireflare's apparent ability to eat such things with impunity, and she decided to ask about it.

"How in Celestia's name do you intend to eat all those muffins and not come out of here ten pounds heavier? I'd look like a hippo after eating all that..."

Fireflare sighed. Well, they were married....

"...it's the wings. They're, like, ludicrously large for a pegasus. Which also means they're ludicrously heavy. I don't show it because I keep in shape, but if I ever gave up on my exercises and let myself go, I'd have serious back issues... I never told anypony though, because, you know, big wings. They wouldn't understand. It's be like having a two foot long horn, every unicorn would be jealous but you know it would have awful neck problems. Do you know that I've been asked whether these things are natural or not?" She flicked the feathers for emphasis. "I'm... kinda worried that our kids might have problems, actually. The pegasi, anyway."

She swallowed a muffin. "So yeah, this gives me energy to carry two huge masses of feathers that aren't any use when I'm not flying or fighting. It's a little overkill, but I don't do it every month so I should be okay, right?"

After a moment's thought, it all made sense. How often had she sheltered under one of Fireflare's wings, wearing it like a cloak as the pegasus hugged her close? All too often; At one point, Star had gotten so used to the comforting position that she felt cold when the wing was missing. Of course, she had never thought about why one wing could cover her back from withers to rump. It had just never occurred to her. It also explained why the rather bony and angular pegasus was so comfortable to lean against.

"Oh. That makes sense, I guess. I bet they get way heavier when they're wet, don't they?" said Star casually, before an image of a wet-maned Fireflare popped into her head. The unicorn shifted uncomfortably in her seat and tried to banish the idea from her mind's eye; now was not the time to get all hot and bothered. Moonshine bounced in her lap and squeaked for another bit of doughnut, and she gave it to him whilst trying to dislodge the picture in her mind, but...it wasn't easy.

It had been a while since she'd done more than kiss Fireflare, and ignoring something like that was getting harder every day.

"Uh...ahem. Well, I've never had a problem with them, but I suppose carrying them around all the time must get a bit tiresome. I know exactly what it must have been like; after all, I doubt your wings were much heavier than Moonshine."

"Well, a bit. The water usually slides off, but some of it gets caught in a downpour." Fireflare snarfed down another muffin, noting the uncomfortable and embarrassed shifting. Dang it, she couldn't wait for Star to get the stitches out of her... self, she always seemed happier when she... got to play. And also it would give them a chance to switch things around, let the pegasus carry a foal to term. "I guess they're not as heavy as he was, and they do support themselves a lot... wow, when it's my turn I'm really going to get some spine-snapping, aren't I?"

The pegasus nuzzled her wife gently. "But you know, I think I'll be able to make it just by looking at your face... not garunteeing anything, but I think I will be." She smiled and kissed Wishing Star.

Just read this, and, oh my, splitting my gut. Ow. I have not come across this particular subject on pegasi winglanguage as yet. There might be, some where, but I havn't stumbled across it, so, you sir are now a trend setter. Yes, a trend setter. The author TAW touched (lol, touched ) upon it in her blog here http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/53573. I'll be most interested to see if this concept is fun enough to actually influence any significant number of authors here. One can only hope.

The God Empress Lauren Faust approves.

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This was a great story, very funny and very well thought out. I especially loved how you gave each character their personal narrative inside their minds, which made for some truly hilarious moments. The way you autored the scientific text was brilliant and you had me laughing throughout the whole thing.

Thank you for a most enjoyable read :)

PS

>>10354261035426

It's always Sunny in Fillydelphia

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Ahh.. I was actually looking for something documenting pegasi wing meaning a bit ago.  I'm glad I stumbled across this.

A fun little story.

At least Celestia won’t have to worry about The Talk. Twilight is bound to have come across the relevant information in the Biology section.

>>10367491036749

I will kill each and every person, pony, griffin, phoenix, and every other creature in time that replies to my earlier comment.

EVERY

SINGLE

BEING.

EVERYTHING WILL DIE.

>>10354261035426>>10368651036865

You can't stop me with your idle threats.

None shall stop the femslash shipping. Because FLUTTERSHY GETS ALL the CHICKS!!!

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Excellent work. Usually I can offer some parting words of advice, but not this time. No, sir, you've completely outstripped my editorial expertise.

This story...

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Fav'd and Thumb'd.

Well written and amusing. Allow me to elaborate on a few points? YMMW ofc.

First the bad: Unfortunately it contains several clichés (mostly with Derpy), but nothing that would actually detract from the story. Maybe if you'd finished the story with the comment of "gotta go get sum muffin with Derpy" it would have made for a stronger, more ambiguous finish, whereas now the ending feels over-exposed. Not only did you make it clear that Twily is into mares, you underlined it, used a larger font, and also forgot your capslock on.   I also wonder if you could have told this story without the AppleDash or DerpyLight ships? I have nothing against ship/clop, but I'm left to wonder if it actually added in this case. Especially when the story is lacking the Romance-tag, the AJRD -dating came as a bit of a surprise.

Then the good: Using the book as the basis for the story worked well, and the romance that the author found after his research was endearing.  The way the characters act (apart from the obvious shipping) and some of the raunchier choices of words, this could be full canon, which I always respect in a SoL -story. Especially the characters of Twilight and Rainbow Dash felt well written and very much in character. And canon or not, the list of euphemisms for "wingboner" made me scroll up so I could click the thumbs up before finishing the story.

An amazing story that deserves its ranking in the Featured list! Well done.

Cool story bro, and an interesting take on wing language.  Also just so you now the muscular white Pegasuses, with the TINY wings, name is Snowflake, just so you know.

hilarious story. one of the best i have ever read. needs a sequel.

>>10371441037144

Not entirely sure from the impression I get in this fic that Twi IS into mares, exclusively anyway. Seemed more like a general response to the offered affection. Almost pansexual really. I mean even Dash was totally jealous of Twi's attention from a male Wonderbolt. It's one of the reason I like Tcher's shipping. He allocates sexuality via serendipity and then splatters it with casual ambiguity.

This was really cute.

well, that was pleasant. i find that youve written that story quite well, quality descriptions, thoughts, and relate-able actions. i enjoyed the premise of the story within the story making the actually story progress. equally, it was simple to grasp what would happen next and so forth and so on with an expected, yet still well thought out and well made ending. interesting light shipping, normal in most respects, but done up to par if you ask me. so overall, great job! keep up the good work.

so is dash a lez or something. These stories have way too much of that now adays.

>>10371281037128

I'm not stopping it.

I'm saying that there is no such thing as a straight ship.

Need sequel NOW!!!!!!!!!!

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Awesome. WRITE A SEQUEL!

Do it

Do it

Do it

Do it

That was hilarious. I laughed from start to finish.

I admit I skimmed all through the beginning. Because, unsurprisingly, my silly little mind was just scanning for wingboners, wingboners, wingboners.

anyways, i lol'd. good story.

Daaaamn yoooou! I don't usually ship Twilight, but DerpLight just seems so cute! I really hope you write a story about them some time.

Surprisingly cute.  Definitely a new favorite. :D