True Betrayal

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Tempest thought the best way to survive was all alone, but an inky little dancing demon shows her that she knew nothing of being betrayed.

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Chapter 1 Inky beginnings · 21st Nov 2018 · 413 words
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Chapter 2 An agreement. · 22nd Nov 2018 · 313 words
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Chapter 3 Audio and Stare-io · 26th Nov 2018 · 346 words
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Chapter 4 Bendy: Ruler of Canterlot · 4th Mar 2019 · 419 words
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Chapter 5 Dreaming of a escape · 9th Jul 2019 · 386 words
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MarblePieLover

MarblePieLover #1 · Nov 26th, 2018 · · · Chapter 3 Audio and Stare-io ·

If anyone wants to do a reading. they can!

TheMajorTechie

TheMajorTechie #2 · Nov 26th, 2018 · · · Chapter 3 Audio and Stare-io ·

You misspelled "betrayal" in the title.

Sober

Sober #3 · Nov 26th, 2018 · · · Chapter 3 Audio and Stare-io ·

At the risk of seeming like a grammar nazi... (I'm not, promise!) I would suggest finding a proofreader after reading the description.

Some things I saw when going over it.

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Missing an 'a' in Betrayal

Tempest though she knew the best way to survive was all alone. But a inky little dancing demon shows her that she knew nothing of being traitored.
Bendy and the ink machine belongs to the meatly

-"though" should be "thought"
-"she knew" should be removed or edited. I forget the word for it but it effectively breaks the sentence. (Tempest thought the best way to survive was all alone.)
-"a" should be "an"
-"traitored" should be "betrayed"
-"ink" should be capitalized as it's a title.
-"machine" should be capitalized as it's a title.
-"meatly" should be "theMeatly"