Another story Though it is sad, I'd like to see where this progresses. Poor AJ While I was reading, I spotted two things that you might like to adjust: (change then to than) But soon as she got any farther back than my cutie mark it felt all wrong, and I had to pull away. (rearrange) I want to fix it/this so bad, and I can't. But tell me anything I can do to make it better, it'll happen right away, no questions.”
This is really good so far. I was wondering what it'd be about when you said that you were going to write it and I've been pleasantly surprised by the topic you picked. That twist on Manehattan was very well done. I can't wait to see how this'll develop!
992705 I know. Her situation has to be one of the hardest in the world, and especially for AJ.
992869 Thank you, I'm honored. I'm going to do my best to make this dark and painful, but to still show the hope and magic all around. We'll see if I can pull this off and stay in your top five.
993625 Dash might present some complications as well as support, but it's definitely better for AJ to have her than to be alone.
994059 Thank you. I seem to write AJ a lot, so I'm glad the practice had paid off.
994677 Thanks! It's a difficult subject, and I hope I can do this well. I've seen other (not-fanfic) authors deal with the subject with grace and dignity, and I'm hoping I can do the same.
Well I know who's gonna be eviscerated in my dreams tonight. Very well written piece of work ya have here. Now where's my scalpel? I feel like pealing an orange.
This is a really interesting concept - I never would have thought that up for the oranges, but the way you put it makes it work (I may have to wait a while before watching the cutie mark episode again, though, or I may punch my computer screen when the uncle shows up). Is it weird that concepts like this can strangely work in the pony universe? The idea reminds me of Law and Order SVU a bit. Definitely interested in reading more, and hopefully AJ can stop her pedo-pony uncle and send him to prison - or better yet, get Celestia to boot him to the moon.
995121>>995360 Thanks! It'll be a little while before we actually deal with Uncle Orange, but he will be dealt with.
995499 I'm sorry if I ruined Cutie Mark Chronicles for you. . . I hope it's not for too long. And I don't think it's weird that they can work. The innocence in MLP can make the loss of it a striking contrast, if it's handled carefully, and the strong bonds of love between the ponies give it hope for healing. It does take an extremely careful hand, which I'm trying to have.
I'm glad you're watching, and I'll be interested in your thoughts!
This looks very interesting. First thing on my reading list tonight!
Intense ...
More please
Poor Applejack.
Oh Bookplayer. Wow. Seriously, bravo. This is exceptional work. Anguish and lies, fear and self-loathing, just... again. Seriously.
Cracked my Top 5 of all time. Can't wait for more.
Another story Though it is sad, I'd like to see where this progresses. Poor AJ
While I was reading, I spotted two things that you might like to adjust:
(change then to than) But soon as she got any farther back than my cutie mark it felt all wrong, and I had to pull away.
(rearrange) I want to fix it/this so bad, and I can't. But tell me anything I can do to make it better, it'll happen right away, no questions.”
Well. It's an uncomfortable and difficult subject and you've written it well.
I'd like to read more.
congrats on writing about a subject, about which I made clear it wouldn't interest me, in a manner that interests me.
Damn you, magnificent writer
God speed
Ouch. Poor AJ. But... at least she's not alone. As long as she has Dash, she should be alright.
This is really good,It's getting Intense.Your a really good writer ,This has to be the best Apple jack story I have read in awhile
This is really good so far. I was wondering what it'd be about when you said that you were going to write it and I've been pleasantly surprised by the topic you picked. That twist on Manehattan was very well done. I can't wait to see how this'll develop!
I think I'm going to be sick too.
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Thank you.
992692
Working on it.
992705
I know. Her situation has to be one of the hardest in the world, and especially for AJ.
992869
Thank you, I'm honored. I'm going to do my best to make this dark and painful, but to still show the hope and magic all around. We'll see if I can pull this off and stay in your top five.
992905
Thank you for pointing those out. I fixed them. I'm glad it's interesting.
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Thank you. I'm sure I'll write something bad someday, but I hope it's not often.
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Thank you. I'll try to have more soon.
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Someday you'll learn to trust me. I'm glad you like it, because I don't know what I'd do without you on my side.
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Dash might present some complications as well as support, but it's definitely better for AJ to have her than to be alone.
994059
Thank you. I seem to write AJ a lot, so I'm glad the practice had paid off.
994677
Thanks! It's a difficult subject, and I hope I can do this well. I've seen other (not-fanfic) authors deal with the subject with grace and dignity, and I'm hoping I can do the same.
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I'm sorry. I know it's difficult, I'm sorry if you found it upsetting.
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I know, probably not a take that comes to mind when one thinks of ponies. I hope you found it interesting.
Well I know who's gonna be eviscerated in my dreams tonight. Very well written piece of work ya have here.
Now where's my scalpel? I feel like pealing an orange.
This is a really interesting concept - I never would have thought that up for the oranges, but the way you put it makes it work (I may have to wait a while before watching the cutie mark episode again, though, or I may punch my computer screen when the uncle shows up). Is it weird that concepts like this can strangely work in the pony universe? The idea reminds me of Law and Order SVU a bit. Definitely interested in reading more, and hopefully AJ can stop her pedo-pony uncle and send him to prison - or better yet, get Celestia to boot him to the moon.
994909 The thing is, I already knew and said that you would write it in an interesting way for me
It is YOU who didn't believe me and asked me if I wanted to skip this story
I already trust you
994997 Yeah, this is the first serious fic I've read in a while, so I was kinda caught off gaurd. I'm hoping Rainbow Dash pays that creep a visit.
995121>>995360
Thanks! It'll be a little while before we actually deal with Uncle Orange, but he will be dealt with.
995499
I'm sorry if I ruined Cutie Mark Chronicles for you. . . I hope it's not for too long.
And I don't think it's weird that they can work. The innocence in MLP can make the loss of it a striking contrast, if it's handled carefully, and the strong bonds of love between the ponies give it hope for healing. It does take an extremely careful hand, which I'm trying to have.
I'm glad you're watching, and I'll be interested in your thoughts!