Trixie stood abruptly, slamming her hand on the table. Fluttershy shut up with a quiet squeak.

“Last I checked, this was a public space. You don’t have any say over who can and can’t eat here.” Her voice was simmering with barely suppressed anger. “But luckily for you, we were just leaving,” Trixie grabbed Sunset’s hand and stormed out of the shoppe, ignoring the appalled faces of her ex-friends and the angry shouts of Rainbow Dash attempting to get the last word.

Way to go Trixie, that's showing them!

Yeah... I know how that feels. My attempts on offing myself is in double digits. The feeling is surreal and its terrible how anything small can trigger it. But a small account of kindness can make somebody want to continue on.

omg this trixie and sunset dynamic is just killin it. in the good way. like I NEED MOAR. *ahem* i mean, this has my interest, totally not in a *slack off work to read in the bathroom way*

Trixie is amazing in this fic, love the interactions with her and Sunset.

It's official. I love this Trixie!

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Sunset’s right... Trixie is a BADASS.

I really like this interpretation of Trixie!

Does Princess Celestia know everything??? AND she's not over there knocking at Twilight's door to get her to the human world?! I'm assuming Luna told Celestia some, but not all of it... ORRRR... hmm... maybe since suicide apparently isn't prevalent in Equestria, Celestia isn't taking it seriously enough...

I am going to laugh if Twilight shows up with all these trinkets that boost serotonin, or normalize other imbalances and stuff. If the ponies can do this though, they basically can give themselves all the symptoms of being high with no withdrawal by just putting a necklace on or taking it off

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Eeyup!

Woo, another chapter! After this, I plan on keeping to a weekly update schedule, so hopefully there will be an update every Monday!

Cant wait!

Sunset looked back at her in amazement. Trixie had so fiercely stood up for her, without any hesitation. “Trixie,” she started, appreciation filling her voice. “... That was fucking badass.”

Hell yeah it was! Great chapter BTW

Trixie > yeet

Sorry I had to do it

But if I know one thing about Sunset Shimmer, it’s that she is very perseverant.

Poor choice of words about someone who just attempted but failed to commit suicide.

Trixie is definitely becoming the rock Sunset needs in her time of healing. This story is getting better & better, I can't wait for next week!

Bitty bug ok

How many chapters are you planning to write?

(Well... Trixie's definitely made a positive impression in this fic. She's very much the ally Sunset needs, the one in her corner.)

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I thought that too while reading this.

Otherwise this chapter was very.... jarring might be a semi-proper word to use here. Kinda got a bit of a major whiplash from the last chapter's well "whoa holy s**t!" to this chapters chill. They just kinda seem like 2 chapters from different toned stories or like this is a chapter from further down in the storyline. I don't know why it just feels off. It is a good chapter, but it feels a bit like it skipped something is the best way to put my ramblings.

Sunset halfheartedly glared at the girl across from her. “I don’t blame her for trying, but...” Sunset sighed. “I’ve made my choice. I know what I want and I won’t stop until I get it.” If anyone heard Sunset’s recent thought, they might worry that she really was reverting back to her old self. In reality, Sunset was filled with a grim certainty, knowing that the world would be better off without her “fucking everything up, as usual.”

I don't know if this is what was intended, but to me, this comes across as trying to dictate how the reader should interpret the text. Personally, I find that kind of thing kind of annoying, like a laugh-track, but less subtle. If I were to suggest a way to improve it I would say to just cut 'If anyone heard Sunset’s recent thought, they might worry that she really was reverting back to her old self. In reality,' and leave the rest.

“I- I wanted to tell you,” Trixie broke Sunset out of her dark musings. She looked up at, meeting honest purple eyes. “I know you aren’t Anon-a-miss.”

Ok, Trixie not talking in the third person; I can deal with this. No seriously, it doesn't bother me at all. Stop looking at me like that.

“Trixie,” Sunset’s hoarse voice cut off the babbling girl.

Sunny's voice is always a 'ho(a)rse' voice. Horse puns!

Sunset started up one of her favourite movies-“Lilo and Stitch, you never fail me.”

I see we're going for cruel irony. I approve.

“I worry too, sister. But if I know one thing about Sunset Shimmer, it’s that she is very perseverant.”

Yes, because we all know how well you understand Sunset. It's not like the last time you made an assumption about her character lead to her running away through an interdenominational portal or anything. I'm sure your judgement is sound as can be.

“I thought we made it clear that you are not welcome here,” Rarity added.

I'd thought they meant at that specific moment. It makes me wonder what the Cakes think of the Humane 5 driving away business from their shop. That can't be good for their reputation.

Neither of the girls noticed that their hands were still comfortably clasped together.

YES! Very, very well done. To be honest, I had forgotten that this story had a shipping element until the bit with a blushing Trixie. Her actions came across more as a concerned friend than a love-struck teen girl; this is so much better. Personally, I find the stories where any romance takes a secondary role. It means that the relationship can play out independent of the story, and one won't necessarily end with the other. The read then gets the chance to see a couple actually be a couple.

All in all, probably the best chapter yet. It still leaves me looking forward for more. I hope this isn't an end to the equestrian side of things, with Luna and all that. I don't think it said anything about Sunset writing Twilight about her current situation. It would be amusing to get a scene of a concerned Twilight showing up to find Sunset with Trixie; both of her close former villain friends being close with Trixie would be ironic, canon timeline be damned.

Every Monday has another update? MONDAY, HURRY UP AND ARRIVE ALREADY

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Thank you for the suggestion! I went on and took that part out; to be honest, I didn't really like it either, I'm glad someone agrees.

As for the equestrian part of this, don't worry; the story will be checking in on their side of things fairly often.

I'm glad you're enjoying it!!

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I'm not sure how many chapters there will be, but I'm hoping around 15 to 20, more if I can manage it.

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Good to know

Some advice; when two or more characters are talking, you always start a new paragraph when a different person starts talking. Take this for example:

“Lulu?” Luna’s head snapped up. “Oh, my apologies sister, I did not hear you come in,” the Night Princess said, still distracted. “Is this about Sunset?” Celestia asked. Luna had told her of her meeting with the former unicorn, and, needless to say, Celestia was worried out of her mind. Luna sighed. “I just do not know how I am going to tell Twilight,” she explained, worrying her bottom lip between her teeth. “You know how she gets when she is concerned for a friend, I do not want her to…” Luna struggled to find the proper term. “Freak out?” Celestia supplied. “Yes, that.”.

The proper format should look like this:

“Lulu?” Luna’s head snapped up.

“Oh, my apologies sister, I did not hear you come in,” the Night Princess said, still distracted.

“Is this about Sunset?” Celestia asked. Luna had told her of her meeting with the former unicorn, and, needless to say, Celestia was worried out of her mind.

Luna sighed. “I just do not know how I am going to tell Twilight,” she explained, worrying her bottom lip between her teeth. “You know how she gets when she is concerned for a friend, I do not want her to…” Luna struggled to find the proper term.

“Freak out?” Celestia supplied.

“Yes, that.”

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Ah, thank you! I'll go back and edit the previous chapters after I post tonight's.

Disney movies are the ultimate feeling generators. Depending on what you watch, you will experience a roller coaster of emotions and change the way you feel. I know this from experience

Trixie > yeet

Trixie is fucking hilarious kek

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Yeetus feetus

Trixie > hey nerd

Trixie > yeet

i have a spiritual connection to your trixie

Unfortunately, I just can't see this portrayal of Celestia. She's practically Sunset's adoptive mother, and while she knows that there are lessons to be taught, she will step in when things go bad and no one else would.

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I love this version of Trixie so much.

I just realized that since Trixie’s dad’s a beekeeper, she gets to have free honey. Also, Trixie’s right: the Rainbooms can’t kick someone outta a public space and I’m pretty sure Pinkie doesn’t own Sweet Snax or whatever the name of the cafe is.

I really like this story!
I like the mane five a lot but in the Anon-a-miss they really needed a reality check.
I hope that when they find out what they almost made do sunset, they are devastated and realize that they should be treating sunset like a goddess after they way they treated her.

“Last I checked, this was a public space. You don’t have any say over who can and can’t eat here.” Her voice was simmering with barely suppressed anger. “But luckily for you, we were just leaving,” Trixie grabbed Sunset’s hand and stormed out of the shoppe, ignoring the appalled faces of her ex-friends and the angry shouts of Rainbow Dash attempting to get the last word.

GO TRIXIE!

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Yep

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Yep

So... Trixie's parents are a doctor named Supernova and a scientist named Dewdrop.

Is it weird that that's the part of this chapter that I couldn't stop thinking about?

I remember reading somewhere that lilo means fallen apart or something similar to that, and that lilo and stitch pretty much means broken and fixed. Just wanted to put this in here for people who didn’t know already.

Neither of the girls noticed that their hands were still comfortably clasped together.

Awwww!! That’s adorable!!!!

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She just....resonates with me. I don't know how else to put it.

Trixie > yeet

Im all about Trixie using the Y E E T

Not sure how I feel about Trixie saying yeet

I fucking love this Trixie.
Bravo, the best (human) version

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Me too. yeet

“Can’t even kill myself right...”

Mood, Sunny. Mood.