There's a been a slew of new hires at Canterlot High, but something about Sunset's new French teacher seems familiar ... and unsettling. Why can't she figure out what it is? And why does Sunset so badly want a kiss from her pale blue lips?
It feels good to see this amazing fic come to a brilliant end. I'm greatly looking forward to your future works and I seriously hope you do another fic involving hypnotic kissing because there are seriously not enough of those.
*portal opens* OW! *being falls back through portal* *portal closes*
-a few hours later- *portal opens* WHAM! WHAM! WHAM! -repeat for many many hours-
In Equestria "I don't care how long I have to do this" says Pinkie Pie, rolling a heavy metal ball through the portal, "Or how many it takes if I somehow lose one. I am going to see my friends at Canterlot High."
I wish I could agree this was a great ending, but I am pretty disappointed in this.
The everyone in town dressed like Adagio including men seems out of left field and added little.
Why was Sunset elevated to almost Dazzlings level of authority
Why are the Dazzlings focused in on Sci-Twi who've they've never even met.
Why cut off the portal to Equestria instead of using this as potential for revenge?
You had no closure with Applejack. and Pinkie Pie wasn't even in this chapter
Almost nothing of the other Humane 6's behaviors, other than obeying the Dazzlings of course, except for Rarity who ends up working as a bartender because she's a drunk basically
Overall, this was a good story, until you decided you needed to end it and all the end did was show that the good guys weren't going to win. The way the last heroes went down was not as interesting or sexy as it was early
And reading your comment, I don't watch CinemaSins, but I do know that if you don't deal with nitpicks that can be seen easily you can end up with a story that doesn't make internal sense
Sadly the last really good chapter of this story was Flooding Down Sunset Boulevard, with the last three amounting to "and then the good guys decided to try some stuff and the bad guys took them down so easily their fates ended up exactly the same as the random bystander on the streets."
If you really wanted to do a mass mind control thing, the Dazzlings using the Rainbooms to do it would have been a better idea
I have no issue with this kind of ending. It might not be hero-triumph-villain thing, but still not that dark. However, I still don't know what, in the end, happened to Applejack - and that bugged me a little.
Nope. There are some stories that when you start them, they find out your address and send you a priority mail postcard that reads "Give me a bad ending," and who am I to disagree with the story?
Idea for a good ending: Twilight realizes that she can't beat the Dazzlings... unless she beats them at their own game. She takes the little trickle of magic she has left, and infuses it with the least-sexy language known to humankind: Welsh. She makes the Dazzlings short-circuit by saying sexy phrases in phlegmy Welsh, like cusanu fy ngwefusau rhywiol (kiss my sexy lips) and Fi yw eich butain fach ymostyngol (I am your submissive little whore ["slut " doesn't translate]). The welsh also causes the students' clothes to turn into Welsh football tees, and they start pelting the Dazzlings with soccer balls.
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Please. This story was never in any real danger.
... it's everything else that's on thin ice.
It feels good to see this amazing fic come to a brilliant end. I'm greatly looking forward to your future works and I seriously hope you do another fic involving hypnotic kissing because there are seriously not enough of those.
*portal opens*
OW! *being falls back through portal*
*portal closes*
-a few hours later-
*portal opens*
WHAM!
WHAM!
WHAM! -repeat for many many hours-
In Equestria
"I don't care how long I have to do this" says Pinkie Pie, rolling a heavy metal ball through the portal, "Or how many it takes if I somehow lose one. I am going to see my friends at Canterlot High."
Yup
Totally knew that everyone would finally give in and submit to the Dazzlings.
Histoire incroyable, merci!
I wish I could agree this was a great ending, but I am pretty disappointed in this.
The everyone in town dressed like Adagio including men seems out of left field and added little.
Why was Sunset elevated to almost Dazzlings level of authority
Why are the Dazzlings focused in on Sci-Twi who've they've never even met.
Why cut off the portal to Equestria instead of using this as potential for revenge?
You had no closure with Applejack. and Pinkie Pie wasn't even in this chapter
Almost nothing of the other Humane 6's behaviors, other than obeying the Dazzlings of course, except for Rarity who ends up working as a bartender because she's a drunk basically
Overall, this was a good story, until you decided you needed to end it and all the end did was show that the good guys weren't going to win. The way the last heroes went down was not as interesting or sexy as it was early
And reading your comment, I don't watch CinemaSins, but I do know that if you don't deal with nitpicks that can be seen easily you can end up with a story that doesn't make internal sense
Sadly the last really good chapter of this story was Flooding Down Sunset Boulevard, with the last three amounting to "and then the good guys decided to try some stuff and the bad guys took them down so easily their fates ended up exactly the same as the random bystander on the streets."
If you really wanted to do a mass mind control thing, the Dazzlings using the Rainbooms to do it would have been a better idea
Yeah, I figured that was what was gonna happen. A very sexy end to the fic. Great work, Citrus!
I have no issue with this kind of ending. It might not be hero-triumph-villain thing, but still not that dark.
However, I still don't know what, in the end, happened to Applejack - and that bugged me a little.
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yep, no Applejack, and really barely any Pinkie. She gets caught two chapters ago and never appears again
Eh.
Great ending loved the holl story.
I like this ending, but can we get a good end to this story as well by any chance?
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Nope. There are some stories that when you start them, they find out your address and send you a priority mail postcard that reads "Give me a bad ending," and who am I to disagree with the story?
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this was very obviously a bad end story, I just find the ending strange personally
Idea for a good ending: Twilight realizes that she can't beat the Dazzlings... unless she beats them at their own game. She takes the little trickle of magic she has left, and infuses it with the least-sexy language known to humankind: Welsh. She makes the Dazzlings short-circuit by saying sexy phrases in phlegmy Welsh, like cusanu fy ngwefusau rhywiol (kiss my sexy lips) and Fi yw eich butain fach ymostyngol (I am your submissive little whore ["slut " doesn't translate]). The welsh also causes the students' clothes to turn into Welsh football tees, and they start pelting the Dazzlings with soccer balls.
I'd love to see a sequel where the Dazzlings actually try their hand at conquering Equestria.