Mystery of the elements of harmony

by Fast Hack

mystery of the elements of harmony

On a warm summer day in equestria a group of fillies are taking a tour through the canterlot gardens. They stop at the statue of Discord the God of chaos.

Cheerilee starts to talk about what discord has done and the chaos he spread throughout ponyville.
“OK class settle down this is Discord the God of chaos he pits ponies against each other, the only way to stop him is to use the elements of harmony which happened before by Princess celestia and her sister Luna”.

As the group leaves the statue it starts to crack open and you hear him laugh.
The next day pink clouds roll in and it starts to rain chocolate milk Twilight looks out the window to see pinkie pie sitting in the grass with her mouth wide open letting the rain fall into her mouth. Twilight walks out of the library and trots up to pinkie and says “Pinkie what are you doing?”

Pinkie answers “its chocolate rain!”
Twilight starts to think as she walks back to the library and says to herself
“This is impossible it cannot rain chocolate milk”
She starts to go through books and she goes through over a hundred books then she finds a book that says that Discord is the only one that can do this. Then spike coughs up a letter from princess Celestia He starts to read it aloud
“Dear twilight I need you and your friends to meet me at the canterlot castle immediately sincerely Princess Celestia.”
Twilight asks spike “what’s going on?”

Twilight goes to each of her friends’ houses to tell them that they need to come with her to the canterlot castle because princess celestia says that it is very, very important.

Later that day the mane 6 was in the castle talking to celestia about the elements and she tells them that without them they will not be able to defeat discord.

Celestia walks over to a door to a room where the elements a kept and she puts her horn into the hole in the middle of the door and she concentrates her horn starts to glow and the wave of magic flows through the door in a ton of color.
Then she levitates a small box which contains the elements of harmony then she opens the box and twilight exclaims
“THERE GONE!”

Then everypony gasps and rarity says in a panic “There gone.”
Then Discord appears in the stain glass window with the picture of the mane 6 and starts to speak in a riddle.
“If you want to find the elements you must look from where you began.”
Then twilight gets an Idea and she says “The labyrinth.”
So the mane 6 goes to the court yard to the labyrinth then discord appears again and says
“Before you begin you must listen to the rules, now everypony must play fair or the game is automatically over.”
So the games starts and they go into the labyrinth and they split up and twilight says
“When we find the elements lets meet in the middle.”
They start their separate ways and they start to turn gray and the worst thing is they turn against each other.

Now twilight is the only one still in full color and she finds applejack and she is acting weird, she was mean and dishonest to her friends.

Then twilight and applejack wander through the maze even farther until they find fluttershy being mean to all the animals and to twilight and applejack.

Then the keep going till they find pinkie pie talking to herself asking
“What are you laughing at?”

Then she looks up and she sees twilight, applejack, and fluttershy and fluttershy starts laughing then pinkie asks,
“Don’t laugh at me!”

Then fluttershy says

“No”

Then she mockingly laughs

“Ha ha ha.”
Then off in the distance rarity is walking by herself and she sees a brick wall and she sees a hallucination of a diamond and she takes a few steps back and tilts her head down and her horn starts to glow and she takes a huge chunk out of the wall and she starts to rub it.

Then the five of them make their way over to rarity and they see her standing on the rock and twilight asks rarity,
“What are you doing?”

Rarity screams at twilight

“Back off this is my diamond I found its mine don’t touch it!”

Fluttershy flies over and touches the rock and says

“Look I’m touching your diamond HAHAHA”

Then pinkie pie says

“What are you laughing at?
”
Then fluttershy says

“You HAHAHA.”

Twilight looks around and she can’t find rainbow dash then she starts to trot around then discord appears and makes everything disappear and says that one of the rules has been broken he says

“Everypony had to play fair and rainbow dash left so the elements are lost and you will never find them and I win!”
Then he laughs evilly and then twilight sits and starts to think about what discord said then she turns around and says

“I’ve got a book on the elements back at the library and I need all your help to find it.”

So all of them go to the library and start searching for the book then they find it and fluttershy grabs it and yells

“Keep away!!”

So all of them throw the book all around the room making twilight run around until she jump took the book and she yells

“It’s my book and I’m going to read it!”

So her horn glows and it sends a glow around the book and she finds the elements inside of the book
.
Rainbow dash crashes through the window and fluttershy says

“Well if it isn’t rainbow crash.”

Then she laughs and pinkie goes

“What are you laughing at?”

Then fluttershy says

“You”

Then she mockingly laughs

“HAHAHA.”

So they run out of the library and find discord and twilight exclaims

“Prepare to face the elements of harmony”

But it fails and they throw the elements aside and leave then all of the color starts to fade away.

Then twilight goes up to her room and levitates her suit case onto the bed and puts her element in the trash and her
brush in the case shuts it and tells spike that they are moving out of ponyville.

Then spike grabs he stomach and spits up all of the letters twilight has sent to princess Celestia then she starts to read
them and the color starts to come back.

Then she gets and Idea so she grabs her element and the rest of them and goes to applejack and puts her head against
hers and her horn starts to glow and applejack starts to remember all of the happy times they shared and her color

returns to her then they go to the rest of the mane 6 and restore their memories and restore friendship and harmony.
So they all take the elements and find discord and use the magic of them to turn discord back to stone and save the town form eternal chaos and destruction.

THE END

Comments

[RyanMPrower]

Okay, first off, edit the story. A lot of grammar issues!

[Fast Hack]

ok first both of yall need to shut the hell up and there is no grammar issues so smd bitches

[zmuscle]

986334 ok so let me put this in a nicer way again sence i dont see alot of positive feedback for you

this is an improvement for you last story main in terms of spaceing but as ryan and phat both said there are grammer issues so i cant not stress enough on proofreading because like i said before grammer nazi's will find you and before you know it your getting tons of hate so make sure look of grammer error before you post a story or better yet find someone who it will to look through your story not only will they help you with gammer error but its also a good way to get a first opinion before posting

second dont restate info your reader alread know (f.y.i Ii have made this mistake before) as phat has already mentioned your summerizing the first and second episodes of season 2 of which eveyone on this site alread seen so making a chapter that states what people already know can get boring really quickly when making a story you want what you write to something that grabs your reader use your imagination but most of all have fun with it

i hope that this advice your become a better writer and convinces you to keep tring in future attemtps at a story i will be watching and remember this suppost to be fun

[Fast Hack]

989195nigga fuck u

[zmuscle]

989375 and also try not to let hate get to you

[Fast Hack]

989372 well thanks but i thing im going do delete this account cause people are pissing me off to the point were i want to kill them

[Fast Hack]

989381 i try but it just pisses me off and i need some to help me

[zmuscle]

989417 well if you want i could do what i can to help and i might know some people who could help as well if ya like

[Fast Hack]

989451 sounds kool

[zmuscle]

989461 k so what would you need me to do or what do you need help with

[Fast Hack]

i need help with the grammar checks and punctuation corrections and stuff like that

[zmuscle]

989482ok i can help to a degree but im not the best at grammer myself to be honest but im more than willing to try

[fluttershywriter]

The spacing is great compared to your last story. I liked the little detail you added about Twilight going through a hundred books; she's the type of pony who would go through her whole library to find out something