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You probably should, she could be anywhere.
Well, neither is your place Rares......especially with him.
Of course not! You and I both know that after what happened, that'd be the last place she'd wanna have lunch! I know I wouldn't!
Well, you know Dash Rarity...once she's locked onto something, especially if it means protecting her friends, it is nearly impossible to get her to back down from it.
I'm sure she doesn't Rarity.... Then again, this is Dash we're talking about.
You've got this Rares! You got this good! And with Dash, you've got it even better!
Don't let them push you down Rarity! Stand tall!
Maybe not physically, but mentally and maybe physiologically. I've seen my fair share of what dreams can do to a pony.
Or the dreams...and the fear.
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Oh dear Faust, she's so close to losing it!
If it's not, than that is a big red flag!
You...don't remember the name?
Had?
Hmmm...does a mayor usually run three buildings? If its more, than, I think that's another red flag.
No.... It cant be...!
Don't tell me, please don't tell me!!!
So many questions with so many answers...and none of them are pleasant.
In the face of a pony so sweet and innocent...that's about one of the hardest things you can do...along with the fear of how it'll affect them for years to come.
They say the truth will set you free...and ignorance is bliss...one may sound better than the other, but neither is easy to decide.
And which is the better decisions? From how this is, neither is good, and both are bad.
She's trying to look for a dear friend of her's...give the poor mare a break.
It should be, how else are you going to find her?
Don't think she's crazy Rainbow!
Well...at least she didn't call her crazy.
She is?! So...oh no...please no.
Well...maybe its not silly in this case.
It would mean she disappeared before she got it, thus making it a bit harder for her to find. if she did have her Cutie Mark, it would be easier, but since she doesn't....
No you haven't.
It just means that they're late bloomers.
Well there's a new saying!
Probably not.
Cause that'd be really bucked up!!!
Maybe not, but. the most seasoned investigators would be able to detect little pieces that do show that it was. The question is...what and where?
It's start at least.
Yeah, and which pony was the last one that saw her alive. One of the many things detectives do is speak to the person who last saw the person that vanished...questioning their involvement, whereabouts, what they were doing at the time of the disappearance, etc.
Oh...My...Faust......
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Ah! It looks like someone finally spotted a buried clue...
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Sure did......the prime suspect in the disappearance of Moss is standing right under RD and Rare's noses...literally!
Good job. It looks like you took in some of the advice from the review. Rarity is definitely sounding in character here. Hopefully, we get some answers to these questions being raised and see/hear about more instances of time going screwy and things have happening just the other next week when foals are dying of old age in a ghost town that was just constructed.
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Yup! I started my writing session by rewatching "Rarity Investigates" hahaha. I'm already working back through the older chapters to improve characterization and expand a bit on the dreamlike sequences, as they can make things a bit confusing.
Thank you so much for your review! It is actively improving this fic
Quick question, over how many days has threshold taken place so far?
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I starts on a Thursday, and has gone up to Sunday. So this chapter would be day four!
...I'm a little scared to ask, but why?
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Just writing an example of how I gauge pacing. You can find it here.
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No way, that's so cool! I've never seen calculations like that, but they really do distill the pacing of a story pretty conveniently. Neat! (And thanks for the rec )
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If you want, you can take what I wrote and make a post on The Writing Process about how to do pacing. You probably know how to phrase it better than what I was doing but the main idea is that in a story, no matter what the pace is, there needs to be enough plot significant things happening to engage the reader but not so much that you overstimulate the reader.