The CMC decided to have a sleepover at Apple Bloom's; Which is fine: they've had sleepovers before. But this time, their respective sister figures have noticed how they act to and with each other. In the end a conclusion is reached.
WARNING! This fic contains polyamory (with the CMC), herding, suggestive scenes (ONLY THE 2ND CHAPTER THO), cuteness, and justice for a good, unappreciated ship.
Written because there isn't enough CMC polyamory content in this world. The ship doesn't even have a proper name.
The cover art is "Sleepy Little Crusaders" by SpellboundCanvas
My first fic ever. Suggestions as to how I can improve would be highly appreciated.
Chapters (2)
Well done! For a first time writer, you have certainly written an impressive fic. I enjoyed your effective use of dialogue and descriptions and I found the variety of perspectives to be refreshing. In terms of what I found annoying, I would advise you to cut down on italics. You seem to be using them for emphasis but this effect is wasted when they are so frequently used. I would keep a few but substitute most with a more thorough explanation or a synonym. The same would apply for underlining words. Personally, I would appreciate an explanation of how old the cmc are supposed to be here - it's hard to grasp by the text alone. All in all, this has real potential and I gladly await more of this fluffy wholesomeness.
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Thanks for the input! The CMC are around 14-16 here, if you were wondering. Unfortunately I didn't see this until after I finished the second chapter so there's still a lot of italics ihopeyoudontmind
Very cute and very well done. As much as I want to find something to complain about, I honestly can't find anything. Nice work, I'll make sure to stick around for the next chapter.
Oh my god your right, everyone follows my lead and name it the... CMS(cutie mark ship), ok this might be harder then I thought.
Seeing that you said that this is a story where The CMC are in a sort of herd/harem relationship, that means I can add to my Scootabelle list because it counts. I'll make sure to read it whenever I find some time.
Just adorable and I request to see more
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Hehe, thanks! I'll eventually finish this, since I'm currently taking a break. Hope you'll stick around until then!
I don't think your work warrants the sex tag, but I will say that it was utterly adorable and I would love to see more.
Cutie Mark Girlfriends :D ? nah...
POLY MARK CRUSADERS
Hey op I am BEGGING YOU to finish the story its fucking adorable
I NEED MOAR!
THERE AREN'T ENOUGH POLYCMC SHIPPING CONTENT IN THE FANDOM!