well this is my first fanfic on this site, now onto the the description. what happens when you put an oc from a different dimension and takes pinkie pie, the CMC, Luna, Celestia, starlight glimmer, and sunset shimmer into that dimension for 10 years and then return to a world that is starting to turn out like that world unless they can change something, you get this hope you all like. caver art by derpy_Dashie_6167 :)
this is their link to their Instagram account: https://www.instagram.com/derpy_dashie_6167/
Chapters (2)
"eve-free" should be everfree
"everything wants black and" wants should be went
Also, Names of characters are usually in capital letters. E.g Starlight Glimmer
Chapter 1 :
"find her talking to her animals so I waited into she was done talking to them, then she saw me." find should be found. Into should be until
"explosion was hard outside fluttershy’s house" hard should be heard.
Try to include more "Show not tell" technique.
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ok thanks for letting me know what I need to do. 🙂
I do honestly not know how this got approved on the site if the quality of the story matches that of your description. Please use capital letters for all of our sake
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Thank you for telling me that and I will fix that and try to remember that in the future.