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Honestly, this was amazing. I would love to see a sequel if you're up for it.
You spoiled little idjit. Going to counseling is the best thing an edgy teen could ask for (I should know). You get to skip part of your school day, and you get to vent about your everyday problems to someone you can trust. Counseling is practically heaven.
*spoke
Though I have to wonder, has anyone thought to give this guy a taste of his own medicine? Like, he'd mouth off so much, that someone just went "Buck it", and put that mouth to use?
*tight-looking
*white t-shirt
*nipples
*loose-fitting
*would
*sitting in Pinkie's
Eh, that is kinda he only downside; it hardly ever changes how things in your actual life go (unless you have life/health -threatening problems), it's usually just a way to vent and sometimes drink coffee.
*who are willing to
*old-timey
*tight-looking
*ready
*not!"
The way this is phrased is awkward. It seems like he's confirming that she's is, indeed, not worth it. He should either add that her age doesn't matter to him, or change it to "Absolutely" and quickly add that she's worth it, while also expressing that he doesn't think she's old.
*girth
I don't know what to put for this, honestly.
*would be
*had
So I have to say, it was good. Though I have to wonder, how did she fix his life? It seemed to go the movie version of how therapy works.
{Patient: You can never crack me. I am an enigma, carefully crafting a wall of emotion, keeping out the craftiest of counselors and the most thievish of therapi-
Therapist: Peanuts.
Patient: *sniff* All my life I've been blaming myself for the abuse I wasn't responsible for, when all along I needed to let someone in express my sorrows!}
I dunno, just my thoughts.
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Well the time when she helps him and when he's at her door, their's a bit of a time skip. Both what she did and the time frame is up to the reader to decide.
Terra in this is made to be a total little bastard that makes you wanna just strangle him. Compared to him in the other stories, where he's a sweetheart as a colt.
Thanks for the critique.
8736378
Thank you for your critiques and I have applied the spelling errors.