This story is a sequel to Fallout Equestria: Dead Tree
This story is an offshoot from the Fallout Equestria: Dead Tree story written by Tread Lightly otherwise known as Fiaura based on a pen and paper group we play in set in the Fallout: Equestia universe.
Chifundo a slightly effeminate Zebra Stallion Shaman, along with his companions ran headlong through the irradiated rain looking for shelter which thankfully they found in time to save the sicker members of the group, though for Chiffundo, he would also discover somepony to take his breath away.
(Note this is based upon the Fallout: Equestria PnP being published by Dead Tree Studios, check it out here:http://projectdeadtree.com/site/
To warn readers, there will be inconsistency in posting pace as it will depend on when Chifundo gets to spend time with Picline in the pnp sessions
It's quite interesting to read this from another pony's perspective.
I wonder how much variance there are in events through our memories?
You may want to re-read for common phrases like: after a moment, and change those to something else.
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I hope this stays interesting for you.
Also thanks for pointing out my habit of repeating phrases often, I took a read through and think I have fixed the worst of it
it not bad. your starting point is a little weak. i realy think you should have started more with the glowing one a bit more. Use that as a hook to get people in to the story. You kind of just say "the glowing one detonated in such spectacular fashion". this fluffed up a bit would sink the hook in to the readers to want to see where the story go from there. Anyway I am not much of a writer myself and I saw the game that this came from. so it not bad as it goes. And being I am not much of a write. if you want me to go a little bit more in to what i mean hit me up in Discord some time. I can go more in to what I mean. :)
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hmmm, ok thanks for that von, much appreciated
wow, that is a satisfactory ending if I ever saw one. Thank you Headdie, it's quite good actually.
Those rhyme though, we may make a zebra or a show writer yet ;)
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*hug* thanks Fi, means a lot to hear that from you
I totally enjoyed that side story Headdie.
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Thanks Lenz, means a lot to hear that
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No problem, I know what I like.
Very nice. I like his charcter in the orginal story much.
I have to agree with Fiaura, it is fun and interesting to see scenes from a different perspective. Keep up the good work.
I really am enjoying this view of events also. I hope you continue on with it.
Greetings and Salutations,
I game upon your story by the way of Miss Fiora the Tankgirl's page here on this site. Hope you get to finish your side and if I may ask, how many chapters in total will this be?
Sincerely Yours,
Mr.Flamin'Kisses
Enjoying this so far, also FI FORGOT TO LOG OFF MY DAMNED COMPUTER! Keep up the work~