This story is a sequel to The Regular
Sunburst has been trying hard to find his place in Hazel's life following his big move in with his Coltfriend Ristretto. Yet an opportunity to get close strikes as Hazel's birthday approaches. Yet Sunburst may have bit off a little more than he could chew when he and his lunch is thrust into a vacation that neither colts would have ever been able to prepare for.
Thank you to the absolutely amazing OkemosBrony for doing my editing and making my reading... well readable. Check him out, he does some great stuff himself!
And finally a mega enormous thank you to my close friend TeeKay for the amazing new cover art! He is a fantastic artist and you can find him right here!
Ooh! Now this is welcoming. Not only that, but this is an original idea. Man I can't wait to see what you do with this one.
I agreed with Cracked inkwell on this one! it's very fresh and original idea...Happy new years to you, your editor/proofreader & every pony/one here at fimfiction!
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Thank you to both of you! I'm excited to really get into this one. I love to hear the feedback! Get keen for chapter 2.
Oh and Happy new year too haha.
The ending to this chapter made me squeal a little, honestly. I can’t wait for more of this!
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Thanks for the support! Comments really do make it all worth while.
Uuuuhhh.... Try this:
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And another thing:
Soooooo… he didn't tell the truth on his back on the couch? If you mean the other "lie", then the past tense is "lay". No offense, but your stories might need to go through two consecutive proofreaders if your current proofreader is letting these mistakes slip through the cracks.
Is the story dead?