Where am I? Wait, what? I'm a Queen?! HOW THE FUCK-?!
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8682673 Ah, thank you. Despite my brother being a blacksmith and being interested in the trade, I still know little of armor and the like back in the old days. I'll fix this little mistake right away, thanks again.
At least this was a good use of the crossover, though I must ask...
Are the stories the other characters belong to available for reading?
Other than that, thanks for the story - and I'm tracking now for future releases.
8692421 They are indeed available. Rom's can be found here, made by my good, close friend, Maziodyne.
The Marines can be found here. Their story is made by the wonderful inferno of writing passion, InfernoRage008.
8695241
Thanks for the links, and i'm certain that other readers will like to know as well who were the guests this time.
8696601 A good point. I'll put it on the chapter for ease of access.
I didn't get this chapter
8703309 What did you not get?
This chapter was more confusing than anything else...
9447226 I honestly don't see how, so could you perhaps explain to me how it was? It could help me figure out how to make it better.
9447378
As far as I could tell the entire chapter essentially came down to:
A bunch of new character appear from out of thin air for no apparent reason, mess around for a bit (in which nothing of interest or consequence happens), and then disappear just as fast with zero explanation given.
Why even bother including these events if nothing actually influences the story?
9447391 There was influence, actually. New bonds. Character development. Believe me, this was not a flight of fancy, it was planned and thought out.
Just because there are new characters you do not know yet does not mean they cannot have impact.
The whole idea behind this chapter was to give Lucette people she can relate to. It would be folly to make that happen instantly, thus, it was slow, and it shows, hence why you seem to think there was no effect.
I promise you, there was.
Surprisingly this chapter did not seem bad.
That's special considering most crossovers are absolute shit.
Now it ain't perfect, nor very good but it isn't bad and is quite readable.
9473785 Thank you, I'm glad it was at least readable for you. In the future, I'll work to make crossovers better.
(From the perspective of an original generation Displaced writer from back when Chess Games of the Gods was still the major displaced thing)
I honestly plan to skip every single crossover chapter mostly because it's become a consensus among the older Displaced writers community (myself included) that all it does is throw monkey wrenches into the stories pacing since it undermines any struggle of the protagonist when you can just deus ex machina up some good ol fashion bs from another series.
Important friend of Protagonist dies? Better call up that Final Fantasy author for some Resurrection magics. The villain is too strong? Well reach your hand into another world and grab a litteral infinately respawning army of Demons following an Overlord.
The crossovers only seem to undermine the story and characters in the long run because it makes the reader feel that unless the Collaborators specifically brought something up the author would neglect it.
This also comes with the baggage of attaching yourself to stories that either end up canceled, don't interest the reader due to the character/series they are shown as, or on indefinite hiatus thereby choking your story if that happens (I speak from experience)
In closing, crossovers have done pretty much nothing but drag the Displaced stories down 8/10 times (including in my own story I've litterally been stuck in a multi year hiatus trying to find a way to get my OC Back from a crossover), but beyond any of that, I don't take being told I need required reading to understand characters or how they'll impact the plot very well, I came to read your story, not these 17 other schmucks stories that I really could not give two about but would have to read anyway to understand why I should give a about how they impact the story.
9474155 I perfectly understand what you mean, and believe you me, the crossovers in this story were my own attempt at trying to make a crossover actually, well, work. And, while a good few have said I did respectably, there are those like yourself who make good points, and further drive home the fact that I still have a long, LONG way to go when it comes to managing crossovers.
Still, I hope you will at least give the next two crossovers in this story a chance, and if you don't like them at first, a second chance. I've found rather frequently on this site that giving a chapter or story you didn't like before another once over or two really helps you to solidify your opinions. Just one read isn't enough, at least in my book.
However, that is just a suggestion on my part, and if you do not wish to take it, then that is quite alright, dear reader and colleague. You are entitled to your own opinion, after all.
Ah WarHammer.
Bummer, it's like most displaced stories start out ok, but then, other displaced come in and it all goes downhill.
I know that it’s already been mentioned before, but I’d like to put in my own thoughts. Being honest, I feel like the crossover diminishes the struggles that the Storm Queen will go through, especially with this new group that seem so out of place. Thank god they all appeared for this one chapter and left.
While you feel like going a different route, the lack of relating to others could be a way to add some character building. Perhaps give Twilight a chance to help her, or someone else?
Your main character is powerful, yet balanced by experience in actual military and killing matters, as well as not being “lol op”. That’s just the vibe I get from the group.
I think I also just hate how out of place everything in this chapter feels, it seems like an outtake more than anything and reading all the way through It was a chore.
Still, I’ll keep reading and hope things don’t feel this way again! The story itself seems like it’ll get interesting.
9947517 I will say the group will appear again, but I took great pains in their next appearance to make sure things were more enjoyable.
this story definitely took a hard hit in this chapter hopefully it can come back form it
Savage, straight up
I'm fricken dying dude
Great chapter