I've never been sure if I envied ponies for their cutie marks.
On one hand, it's awesome to have your main passion as a permanent magical tattoo, but it has got to be slightly frustrating to know that the meaning of your whole life can be represented by some dumb apples, a silver spoon or even a big ugly snail.
I appreciate not having the meaning of my life plastered all over my butt, anyway. I'm like a blank flank, whose special talent could be just about anything: playing piano, writing books, announcing, or even solving disappearance cases!
Really, I think what I like the most about cutie mark is how great of an excuse it is for peeping at some flank.
This amazing story is not a dissertation about playing music, writing or announcing.
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Discription amuses me. Will read.
Okay totally tracking. Got a good laugh out of this one looking forward to more.
LOL male genetals
This is one of the better comedy stories.
Glad to finally see one out of Spike's perspective.
Oh, Spike!
Excellent
following this
This was, without a doubt, one of the funniest Spike fics I have ever read. Looking into his mind, only to find layers upon layers of VERY different thought processes than we might expect is always fun and throughout the whole thing your writing style kept it from becoming stale or boring even for a second. There are some occasional hitches here and there, but nothing overly jarring. Perhaps the only bigger error I've found was with this line:
"thanking Rainbow Dash for enlightening her day a bit"
I know what you meant by that, but "enlighten" is not the word to use there, as it has a different meaning. You're looking for the expression "lighten up".
Either way though, the rest is very nicely done and pretty humorous throughout. You have a nice grasp on how to create a continuous flow of amusing sentences, not necessarily laugh-out-loud funny(though some indeed are, like the bit about IQs), but enough to force a perma-smile on the reader. I'd love to see more of your work, as this has been a very good first impression! Nicely done!
good old cynicist shit
loving it
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Wow this is is Hilarious.
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Well, thank you very much for this well-detailled comment, the best kind of comments. I am really glad to learn that you have enjoyed my story, and even laughed at it!
I've got to admit the enlighten/lighten up mistake went totally unnoticed, even though I did proof-read this chapter quite a bit. It's fixed now, thanks a lot for telling me!
More will come later, you can be sure about that!
>Of Geldings And Gems
>Geldings
Good so far, but the title scares the crap outta me.
the way you tell this is funny in it of itself good going
Did Spike......break the 4th wall? lol Anyway keep this up man you're doin' great.
THAT ENDING. It be dreamy.
the two lesbos
keep up the great work, im really enjoying this!
why am i reading this poorly written, crummy, pointless, idiotic excuse for a story? -he said jokingly-
haha jk man, this is freaking awesome. i love what you've done with spike. its like i could analyze his personality like hes a real person! he's real in-depth, i seriously love it. sarcasm is great. spikes sarcasm is greater. keep this up!!
possible typo detected?
"Just as energetic as usual, Kinky Pie, but most happiness was gone from her tone and facial expression"
giggity
Excellent
That last line
Spike is awesome. So is Big Mac.
fantastic
this was an alright read.
I can see Spike talking like this since he's surrounded by so many books, but the attitude is "whatever", though I'm not so much as complaining, just pointing it out.
My only real complaint is its not that very engaging for me, I don't know why.
dude, big mac is ridiculous. dashie is WAYYY better for dating than pinkie. cause if she's a lesbo, u can get in on some of her sweet lesbo pony sex.
on a different note, this is awesome.
haha
Not bad. Some spelling errors here and there, but good.
I really like Spike's "teenage" attitude. I mean, we don't really know how old he really is, so maybe he's like this with all his internal monologues in the show.
Keep it up.
255946 i did the math asume pony years are the same as human years and twilight was not even in school yet when spike was born she would be about 5. its made canon that the poines are in thier late teens about 17 and 18 and spike has begain to grow after season 2. spike about 13 plus or minus a year
dude is this the end?
nooded? noodded? whats with nooded? can you please fix that? it erked me XP.
261356 It's incomplete.
It's like the CMC entered the afterlife & The kidnapers got away. . ,
He knew.