To be fair, this covers the sudden HiE thing that quite a few stories skip or forget about. The way home is gone and you are stuck somewhere alone. In another dimension. That is a depressing as hell thought. Kudos to Solid for that viewpoint.
Great chapter again man. I’m curious as to see just how well he’s going to adjust despite the people he left behind. Can’t wait to see the next chapter!
Loving it more with every passing chapter, especially the saucy humor. It's definitely an improvement over the original, which is saying something as the original was great. Can't wait for the next chapter.
8617749 Eh It's honestly not very dark for me i just put it there because some people are sensitive to these types of things and as a heads up that it's not 100% laughs throughout.
You might already have an idea concerning this, but if you decide to do something with poison joke affecting one of the princesses(or Chrysalis), you could have it act like an aphrodisiac and go from there.
He's busy with his own things right now and I didn't want these chapters to sit around any longer so I figured people would rather me post a bit rough than not at all.
8621557 I can agree with that. Your writing isn't so bad that it needs to be proofread before posting. You can likely get away with posting first and proofreading later.
8621485 I'll ignore the misgivings I have with the characters and story for the moment.
Mechanically, OP capitalizes random words, seems to miss words in a jarring way, and pronoun I has gone lowercase multiple times. As have various names. It's almost assuredly exacerbated by reading three badly-written fics in a row, but at this point I'm just jarred out of the narrative whenever I come across mistakes like that.
Whenever I see it, I end up wincing and wrongwrongwrong losing the train of thought. When they happen one after another in quick succession, fixitfixitfixit I lose the will to keep reading.
This also seems to be pretty AU, considering Nightmare Moon. Moony is also an insipid cunt for no reason, and Celestia also seems out of character. It's not marked AU.
8633705 Nothing solid as these chapters have been around for Abit so posting was fast. Working on number 5 now and I'm about less than half way in. With school and work factored in I'd say a week or 2
8660549 Alright. Take your time. If it takes another two months, then it takes another two months. I was just curious since you hadn't been on since Christmas. =)
Honestly impressed. Story in quite a bit more interesting this time around. Keep it up mate
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Thanks!
Yes, this new version pleases me, I need more! Solid Poison, another!
I like wow you put much more dept into the character interactions!
To be fair, this covers the sudden HiE thing that quite a few stories skip or forget about. The way home is gone and you are stuck somewhere alone. In another dimension. That is a depressing as hell thought. Kudos to Solid for that viewpoint.
It wasn’t really dark. The suicide ‘attempt’ wasn’t gory or full of dark feels, unless I missed something :/
Other than that, I fully enjoy the re-write, good to have you back man
Great chapter again man. I’m curious as to see just how well he’s going to adjust despite the people he left behind. Can’t wait to see the next chapter!
Loving it more with every passing chapter, especially the saucy humor. It's definitely an improvement over the original, which is saying something as the original was great. Can't wait for the next chapter.
8617749
Eh It's honestly not very dark for me i just put it there because some people are sensitive to these types of things and as a heads up that it's not 100% laughs throughout.
8618134
Ah yes, I forgot quite a few people can be more sensitive to these topics... or maybe I should stop reading from ‘Opium4TmassS’ stories.
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Later.
You might already have an idea concerning this, but if you decide to do something with poison joke affecting one of the princesses(or Chrysalis), you could have it act like an aphrodisiac and go from there.
Just an idea that occurred to me.
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Maybe.
...this is really rough to read.
8621341
How so?
8621485
Probably because I don't have an editor on this one. There are some errors in there for sure.
8621530
Who's normally your editor?
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NLR_DE_Fusion.
He's busy with his own things right now and I didn't want these chapters to sit around any longer so I figured people would rather me post a bit rough than not at all.
8621557
I can agree with that. Your writing isn't so bad that it needs to be proofread before posting. You can likely get away with posting first and proofreading later.
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Sorry.
8621485
I'll ignore the misgivings I have with the characters and story for the moment.
Mechanically, OP capitalizes random words, seems to miss words in a jarring way, and pronoun I has gone lowercase multiple times. As have various names. It's almost assuredly exacerbated by reading three badly-written fics in a row, but at this point I'm just jarred out of the narrative whenever I come across mistakes like that.
Whenever I see it, I end up wincing and wrongwrongwrong losing the train of thought. When they happen one after another in quick succession, fixitfixitfixit I lose the will to keep reading.
This also seems to be pretty AU, considering Nightmare Moon. Moony is also an insipid cunt for no reason, and Celestia also seems out of character. It's not marked AU.
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Yeah the whole capitalization thing has been a weak point of my writing, so I apologise.
This story is indeed supposed to have an AU tag, but the new tagging system only lets me use 3 so you're correct in that.
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Actually disregard the AU comment. I Derped hard. Fixed it.
That was a awesome/epic read I hope he makes a herd. This chapter had me on the eage all the way through it just keeps getting better the more I read.
Any idea as to an update schedule?
8633705
Nothing solid as these chapters have been around for Abit so posting was fast. Working on number 5 now and I'm about less than half way in. With school and work factored in I'd say a week or 2
8660549
Alright. Take your time. If it takes another two months, then it takes another two months. I was just curious since you hadn't been on since Christmas. =)
Any news?
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Next chapter is Donzo just need to finish editing it
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Nice. I'll be looking forward to it. =)