Ember, Starlight, and Rarity have a girl night inside Twilight's castle. After trying a new Apple's creation, zap-apple cider, the three begin talking about many thing. Loves, dreams, and hopes that all find their ways to Spike.
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Nice grammar, kid.
Great story, we so need more Spike stories from you for sure. I would love to see a follow up with this story. Or maybe one where Spike goes full dom on Shy and Pinkie. Just imagine Twilight reaction finding out two of her friends have become subs to her little brother. Or a closet incest loving Twi get more than she could have ever dreamed when her little brother decide he doesn't just want her as a sister but as his lol.
I loved this but i would sugget getting an editor, there were a lot of mistakes in her but not to the point I couldn't read it. keep it up.
Spike is one lucky dragon.
BOOM!
Don't male dragons have dual dragon hoods?
You got to wonder Cadence is in a lustgasm after sensing the foursome.
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It depend on if you consider dragons reptile or not. Reptile sometime can have two penis. But for my headcannon I consider dragons to be archosaur which include dinosaurs, birds, and crocodilians. Crocodilian can be seen as a go-between between reptiles and archosaurs. One reason is feathers which have only been seen on dinosaurs, birds, and dragons like quetzalcoatl(feather serpent).
Torch...Dragon lord TORCH!
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Sorry I wrote this on my PS4/Vita and sometime the computer give you a different word than what you want.
All you need now is to have Twilights castle surrounded by piles of skittle bloated changelings feasting off their love....
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Lol. You're so right, honestly the story is in bad need of an editor! There's so many basic grammar errors, I wonder if the author has even completed middle school.
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Why don't you put your money where your mouth is and write your own story. you know your opinion would hold more weight if you have the ability to write a story. Isn't it better to build a person up than tearing them down like a troll. If you have a problem with my gammer then point it out which let me fix it and grow as a writer.
Now.....it's rapeing time
This is a strange fic.
The first two chapters try to set up the questionable plot but fail to do so. At that point, you might as well just roll with the punches with a seance rather than two chapters of justification.
Not only that, but I'm not quite sure why actually happened in this fic. It seems like a decent idea, but you don't do much with it.
Anywho. You have a lot to work on, but if you steadily improve, I can see you creating some good works.
All the best.
0//_//0 wow. jest............ wow. .......................... good job spike.
Awesome work! I really loved this fanfic! Wish more Spike x ember was made
I really enjoy the story but I have one small criticism. You seem to have some issues in writing the proper tense for actions. Things that happened in the past are frequently written as present tense and it does get a little distracting. Other than that, Great story .
Story has potential, but please find an editor
so............... when do we get a sequel with spike's horde of gal's pregnant with his kids?
Good concept, but my eyes are bleeding.
Sequal?
Last chapter REALLY should have had a VERY large lemon.
Could use some editing. Had some moments of jumping around thoughts and talking of two different characters in the same paragraph was confusing.
Most could be fixed with a decent editor.
But was a still a decent first chapter.
That FlutterTwi ending surprised me.
Okay, what the actual f-
So.....
It's going to be Reverse Rape?
Ohh! Thank goodness we dodged a crisis. But, interestingly this is the second story I've read about Spike, or his seed reawakening the beast in Fluttershy. And if I'm being honest I really like the concept. We need more Spike and Flutterbat stories to be honest.
Painful to read.
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Its more of a Fluttershy ra*ing Twilight ending. You can clearly see that Twilight was not okay with it.
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Yeah, definitely needed a pre-reader to fix errors with tenses. Also, don't put spoken lines by two different speakers in the same paragraph, that's not standard and it throws readers off as to who is speaking, even if you say it in the unspoken text.
Dragons clearly age differently from ponies so it is believable Spike would be 16-18 you were right.
Lo Ășltimo que dijo ember tiene mucho mĂ©rito