Luna’s eyes shot open. Darkness enveloped her and she sat up in confusion. She wasn’t laying on the crinkly mattress anymore, instead the floor below her was cold concrete, and she was no longer wearing a diaper. She would have normally been relieved to be free of the childish garment, however she felt the air spark with tension which made her uneasy.
Where am I? What’s going on?
Luna thought to herself for a few minutes. When she tried to stand, her head collided with thick metal bars, her head and the metal making a nice crack sound in the silence of the room and eliciting a short yell from the pain. Luna sat back down rubbing her head where she had hit it. She reached out her hooves on either side, finding more rungs, and her uneasiness turned into fear as she realized that she was trapped in a very secure cage.
She tried summoning her magic but came to the conclusion that she still wore the magic blocker, and when she tried to extend her wings, that they were now tightly bound. She strained her ears and her eyes searching for anything that might explain what was going on, any stimulus at all. In the distance she could hear hoofsteps. She listened longer and realized that they were approaching. Before Luna had a chance to fully comprehend what was happening, the lights in the room were turned on, blinding her with their unexpected brilliance.
When she opened her eyes again, her heart went into overdrive. All around the room were strange evil looking tools, all in pristine stainless steel. Each had its purpose, some unknown to her, however she did recognize the bone saw, the hammer, and the assortment of nails on each wall. There were pliers, hooks, and more, some devices looking more sinister than others. The floor too seemed pristine, however upon further examination, faint stains splattered on the concrete of what substance she only could hope was innocent. She looked at the doorway in the corner of the room, hoping to find more explanation there, only to see her sister in a strangely amber inferno.
Luna sat up with joy, whatever was happening Celestia would surely get her out of it, free her from whatever had brought her here. She just about began to greet her with relief, but when they made eye contact, Luna’s stomach dropped. Her sisters eyes were cold and full of malice, nothing like what she had seen before she fell asleep. She scooted backwards but was stopped by the cage bars. “W-what’s going on?? Celestia What is this??” Luna asked with a shaky voice.
“Well it turns out the ponies of Equestria changed their mind” Celestia said with a smirk. “They want you to feel the pain that they did when their crops withered and their children starved. They want you to feel the torturous pain of losing a child, or a limb.” Celestia sneered as she walked up to the cage which Luna was trapped in. “And after you made my life so terrible, I’ve decided to join them. Yesterday was a joke, something to give you a sense of hope, this is your real punishment.” She said, giving her younger sister a toothy evil grin.
Luna’s eyes grew wide and he shook with fear. She knew that look. It was the look she gave Celestia when Nightmare had stolen her away, except Celestia still looked like Celestia, albeit more fiery. “P-please don’t hurt me Tia... I’m so sorry for what I did, I won’t fight you anymore, just let’s go back to before..” she said stammering, reverting back to the nickname she used to call her sister when they were younger.
“Go back?” Celestia said with an incredulous tone, standing straight up, her posture domineering, making Luna feel tiny in her presence. She tipped her head back and cackled, “No Luna you had your chance to be a good girl and you were a very naughty filly, now it’s my turn to get back at you for everything you did to me and Equestria. How could you think that after all you did that there was any chance I’d still love you?” She said her gaze uncaring and filled with unbridled cruelty.
Luna tried to scrunch herself up tightly, “Please no! I don’t want to! Please don’t hurt me I’ll be good! I’ll be a good filly!” She whimpered eyes filled with terror. She’d never seen her sister like this, she’d never been cruel. Even when they fought discord or when they had to kill Sombra she was always sad or reluctant to do unnecessary harm.
When Celestia turned to the wall, Luna grabbed the walls of the cage she was in and tried to force it open frantically. The cage didn’t so much as budge and Luna snapped to attention, with her heart racing when Celestia began to speak.
“Ah this’ll do. Tell me sister, have you ever wondered what it’s like to lose your teeth?” She said wielding a large pair of pliers menacingly.
Lunas began to cry. All she could do was look at the pliers in her sisters control, and beg her not to use them. In the back of her head Luna felt her bladder give way in fear, coating her legs and flanks in the musky scent. She wanted to flee, to move but she couldn’t no matter how hard she tried, and she felt more powerless than she’d ever been before. When Celestia took Luna in her magic and began to force her jaws open, she tried to struggle but the magic held fast. She was bawling now and as she felt the pliers grab onto the first tooth.....
Luna woke up. She was hyperventilating and crying and screaming nonsense as she tried to reason with herself, fear making her mind foggy.
It was only a minute or two after that, that Celestia appeared next to her sister’s crib, asking her what was wrong and if she was ok, seeming frantic, her own heart pumping as she wondered what was wrong.
Luna only continued to cry and when Celestia tried to touch her she shrank away her rambling becoming more audible. “P-please Tia d-dont pull out my t-teeth! I’ll be a good f-filly, I’m s-sorry I’ll never b-be naughty again!” She said to her, eyes squeezed tightly shut and obviously distraught. Her mind reeled, still stuck in the powerful emotions of her nightmare.
Celestia’s heart dropped like a rock seeing her sister in such fear and anguish. She lifted her up in her magic, to Luna’s dismay, causing another bought of confused pleading. Celestia pulled Luna into her arms and cooed softly keeping her close. “It’s ok Lulu it was just a nightmare, you’re alright, I’m not gonna hurt you” She said softly, her hoof petting her sister’s mane.
Luna eventually came out of the fear haze and buried herself deeply into Celestia’s hooves, who welcomed it holding her sister tightly and whispering phrases of love and reassurance to her.
The two of them stayed like that for nearly an hour, just holding each other until Luna’s bawling turned into sniffling and she seemed to be holding her own. When Celestia loosened her hold a moment she noticed that Luna’s diaper was soaked, whether from her nightmare or her subsequent break down it didn’t matter. Without hesitation, Celestia laid Luna down and quickly cleaned her up, making sure to treat her rash which seemed to be clearing up quickly.
As she began to lift Luna to go back into the crib Luna panicked, “No please Tia, don’t leave me alone please!” She begged eyes wide and puffy.
Seeing her sister in such a state broke Celestia’s heart and she brought her sister close to her in another embrace, as they left Luna’s room to finish the night in Celestia’s bed.
My god this has been absolutely hilarious. Jay I gotta come clean, the messages and the pm's I just wanted to mess with you and upset you. When you took what I said to heart and actually made a legitimate story I have to say I was somewhat upset my trolling didn't end how I expected, but I was impressed you actually went and put the effort in. Now over 95 posts and 8k words later it has paid off, for me anyway.
I find it hilarious that you put in so much effort to write your own thing, and it was going so well until you wrote something your audience hated. You effectively cock-blocked a bunch of people reading your comfy story with one hand when you threw in what you wanted. Here they are incoherently jamming in what they want and making you write the story they are too lazy to write themselves. Now here you are deleting posts, defending yourself, back pedaling, and finally giving into their demands. I wanted to be the one to drive you crazy, but it looks like you've done that yourself. Yet, I still feel somewhat bad.
I should have included this in the last pm I sent, the only sincere one I wrote. Don't waste your time writing for someone else, if you are going to put the effort in then write what you want. I have written things that I wanted to do well and they didn't, things that I had no opinion of and they did well, and things that I wanted down voted to high-hell and they weren't.
In short you will never win, so do what you want to do, not what crowd of blue-balled mouth breathers tell you to do.
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I’m pleased that your trolling didn’t turn out as you thought, only rather than spitefully I’m genuinely happy. When we chatted I was frustrated at first but to be honest I was having a hard time finding a commissioner anyways, and tbh you were right. I had enough of a story with what I wanted to write and get where I wanted to go at least most of the way on my own, and though I didn’t exactly have the time dedication that I wanted it was fun writing, especially with all the feedback.
I think you don’t understand what I’m doing with most of my commenters. Sure I had an annoying pest which I had to deal with, and I have someone who I don’t always agree with, but the fact of the matter is, I don’t feel like im giving in. Where I concede points of interest are areas which I agree could use improvement, or in the specific case of SunnyBunny, we click completely and I find myself agreeing with nearly all their suggestions. This whole time I’ve not been pandering to an audience, and sure I was disappointed at first when my story wasn’t received as well as I wanted it to but I got over it finding a few people were all I really needed. I certainly don’t want you to feel bad.
Thanks for the words of wisdom though, and I will recommend that in the future you don’t drag someone along about commissions if you never intended to. ;)
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I forgot to mention that you underestimated my positivity :3
If she didn't think her sister was evil then she wouldn't be dreaming it. More like she would be dreaming about the humiliation and how she could be stuck like this forever.
Maybe if Celestia wan't such a
bitchAANNNDDDD....WHEN IT WAS ALL OVER....LUNA DESTROYED EVERYTHING !!!!!!