Fluttershy likes Rainbow Dash, has for a while now. She decides today is the day she is going to ask Rainbow Dash out on a date.
Thank you to my friend for helping me proofread this.
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It is pretty good for a first attempt. While I don't really see any spelling issues (I don't know squat about punctuation) the dialogue seems a little stiff and forced. But that is what practice is for, keep writing and you will get better.
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Thank you for the feedback. I'm writing my next story currently and I think I'm improving.
10/10 for the title
Jk lol
Pretty nice, short and sweet. It’s a bit too simplistic and needs more dialog though