This is fantastic. For a first story it's really good. The very end seemed a little out of place and under developed, but this story is still great. Adding this to my favorites.
8505024 Thanks Icy, actually I acknowledge the ending did seem rushed while I was re-reading it after it had been approved. I'd actually only wrote this to dip my toe in the water of FiM work.
I usually just write fan stories for my own enjoyment. At the moment I am working on a story that's sitting at around 140 A4 pages, and still growing and according to my proof reader/editor I've "created a monster" lol.
This is fantastic. For a first story it's really good. The very end seemed a little out of place and under developed, but this story is still great. Adding this to my favorites.
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Thanks Icy, actually I acknowledge the ending did seem rushed while I was re-reading it after it had been approved. I'd actually only wrote this to dip my toe in the water of FiM work.
I usually just write fan stories for my own enjoyment. At the moment I am working on a story that's sitting at around 140 A4 pages, and still growing and according to my proof reader/editor I've "created a monster" lol.
Lovely expression of a fond farewell.
Beautiful work.
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Thanks, I actually cried writing the story, even my editor/proof reader said it hit them in the 'feels'.