Applejack is afraid to love. After what she went through when she lost her parents, she had decided not to get in a situation that would set her up for that pain again.
Rainbow Dash has always tried to be cool about her feelings. But she finds out that the old saying: Those who hesitate are lost is painfully true. Plus she will have to live with the ultimate shame; That of Rarity telling her "I told you so" for the rest of her life.
This is like the first story of my series Bookends in that it is a short (yes and rushed) story to see how it is received. That way I know if any sequels are to be attempted.
Chapters (6)
i enyoy this story
8493237
Many thanks.
“Scootaloo says that when a pony is wantin’ to have sex real bad, that they’re horny.”
Everyone has that one friend who knows all about stuff kids shouldn't know about, and I would expect that friend to be Scootaloo.
As much as I like it, it needs a bit of cleanup, but I think you know that already, having admitted to it being rushed.
8493578
I did too. I see Scoot as perhaps a 'street kid' and has picked up a lot that way.
8493593
If you haven't read Bookends, you would see it too is a short story that does a lot in a little time. In such test stories should be enough to peak interest w/o being too wordy.
And yes, my style has always been 'rushed' but I like meat, not how many times Twilight wipes herself after going to the bathroom.
Yes, being a little over the top as far as examples, but you get the picture. But hey! Thanks for caring enough to comment.
Best confession ever! I laughed so hard.
As you saod its a bit rushed compaired to bookends but it was a great read and i hope theres more.
8496416
Thanks, Bookends is about discovery, this is about realization and the panic of thinking that they may have missed their only chance. It would cause a pony to rush headlong into actions.
8497725
Well i cant wait to read more about this and see shere the road takes these two.
8497956
I have an angle I haven't explored in any of my other stories. I have two storied I'm working on, as well as finishing up a couple on my page. I will get to them as I do. Wish me luck.
8498149
Wish granted. Lol
Per usual, might be fast paced, but it was deliciously cute. Loved it. On to the next ones I'm catching up on.
9633005
Thanks my friend!