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TheAncientPolitzanian


Proofreader and occasional writer. The sun tries vainly to stay lit for another day…

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There are many lands through the mirror; strange ones where all manner of things are possible, even one where the righteous are instead wicked and the only hope fell to the villainous. A world put out of sorts when the Good King Sombra absorbed the evil of the Two Sisters.

The Overlord, Thorax, has come to set the world back into its dark path, and only the recently turned Sisters stand in his way... but they'll need help. Light once came through that mirror. Surely light can be brought forth again, to quell this rising evil before it is too late.


Prologue through Chapter 26:
Written by Disappointment-Incarnate
To be proofread by TheAncientPolitzanian

Cover courtesy of the amazing Mr Tech.

(This story involves the mirror universe that appeared in the IDW comics.)

Chapters (28)
Comments ( 56 )

Love it especially the idea of Thorax of all characters having a spine and being the bad guy

Please continue! This story is really good!

Are we not going to talk about how in the mirror world there is a good Chrysalis who is either captured, on the run or dead and I want to see her maybe her and our Thorax can be great friends

Will the evil versions of the Mane Six actually play a major role this time around?

On a scale of 1 to 10 on how fucked equestria is I say a 11 at least

Definitely getting better, keep it up!

Another good chapter 😀, keep your amazing job. :ajsmug:

Another good chapter… cant wait to see the big fight between the Elements and The Overlord :pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

"Party cannons?" Ember asked, confusion evident in her voice.

Wot

Wow, nice chapter can't wait to see the final battle 😃, keep your great job.

I can't help but imagine Thorax still having the same squeaky voice while giving his evil monologue.

Wow that was just… wow..

Also happy anniversary of your story 😃

8849625
What about the evil versions of Cadence and Shining Armor?

9392519
Jeez, I'm killing all your favorites huh?
Sorry lol

Hidden gems like this are often cancelled because they didn't get the viewership they wanted. This story keeps going on in spite of it's small reception, and I really have to credit the author for being so tenacious.

I'm invested.

9637069
Thanks for the inspiring words man. I am getting a new chapter out soon I hope lol.

I am glad to hear that your invested, I am certainly trying hard to be investing and intresting hahah.

"Perhaps, but likely not." Pharynx said. "Alongside this, I can easily state that the Changelings of this race will be much stronger then any of us. They have been in wars, and have actually fought, we have not. The Soldiers of our kingdoms have never once had a proper war, never mind battle. The only actual battle I can think of that has happened was the siege of Canterlot a couple years ago, and that battle lasted for all of 20 minutes and it was perhaps the most one sided battle I can think of. That is until Equestria cheated."

yep,Equestria really lucky

now i really need Chrysalis in the main world to show up

This is the most nail biting fimfiction I have read. I really hope you complete it.

Second time reading through this story and I must. Know. More!

Will you continue this please???

I wish this continues, I wonder if the alternate Ember and Thorax become a couple or friends?

This chapter is always the saddest

Please continue, I want to see how the story ends

Currently, I’d vouch that the story’s rather compelling. The only “real” complaint I have for it is that it needs to be edited, as there’s some words and phrases in here that really, really oughtn’t be capitalised, and it throws the literary flow off a tad.

Other than that, the characterisation be güd, and the motives of m!Thorax are evil enough to be evil enough. :moustache:

A world put out of sorts when the Good King Sombra absorbed the evil of the Two Sisters.

Waiwaiwaiwai—right, okay. So, I have never (and I mean ever, except for that one we don’t talk about with the overzealous cockatoo, illegally, that one time) read the comics. Ever. So I don’t know whether this is canon (to the comics) or not. Either way, if evil-Celestia and Luna are turned good, would that make them the mirror versions of Daybreaker and Nightmare Moon? :unsuresweetie:

11351911
Yeah I wrote this story like five years ago. It's not that good lol. If I ever continue I will Certainly do it with an editor.


11351915
Yep, that's how the mirror universe arc ends in the comics. Pretty wacky Ending.

It's okay! Sorry to see the story go though.

I'd continue it for you if I could, but I've got my own Changeling series to do. I do hope it gets adopted though! Maybe if it doesn't get adopted by the time I've wrapped mine up, I'll come back and offer?

Sad to see this go, even when someone else finishes this amazing story. You will always be the one who brought this story to life. Good luck to you

How would this story have ended?

11384352
It'll still probably be here when you do. Unless someone else takes it of course lmao.

But yeah, I'll keep the feelers out for a while.

11384517
Alright then. I do hope it gets picked up though

Comment posted by TheAncientPolitzanian deleted Oct 18th, 2022

11384517
I'm somewhat interested in picking it up, but I'm not the best at writing this kind of long, high-octane adventure. Unless there's a preexisting outline I can stick to, I'd probably stall out after a couple of chapters myself.

There is a way I might be able to "hold the fort down", though. If I'm remembering it correctly, you mentioned in an earlier comment that you were interested in having a proofreader/editor look over the story at some point. I have some experience proofreading, so maybe we could do something along the lines of:

  • You transfer the story to my account.
  • I give the story a quick proofreading pass (and, if possible, try completing and publishing any unfinished chapters that might exist).
  • Once 11384352 Melody Song's wrapped their own changeling series up, I can transfer the story to them and they can write the rest (as they offered to do).

Admittedly, it's a bit roundabout, and I'm not entirely sure it's what you had in mind, so I'll understand if you're not interested. Just figured I'd throw the proposition out there in case it actually held water.

Whatever happens, best of luck with finding someone to carry the torch!

(Also, sorry for the double-post; I accidentally replied to the wrong comment.)

11397805
It seems like a good plan. Minor problem with it on my end is that I'm going to be entering college next fall, though I still plan to remain active on the site. So I myself might need an extra hand or two making sure chapters go up on time. (maybe co-writers or proofreaders, idk)

I do like the idea though!

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Makes sense. Like I said, I do have proofreading experience, so (hypothetically speaking) I might still be able to help in that regard after I hand the story off to you.

Of course, it obviously also comes down to whether or not Disappointment approves of the arrangement. They mentioned that their experience with "adopting" fanfics mostly comes from the way it's done on fanfiction.net. I'm not entirely sure how authors do it over there, so it really depends on what Disappointment specifically meant by "adoption": the right to create a sequel story that serves as a continuation (i.e. what Rated Ponystar's doing with Darth Link 22's Journey to the First Flame right now) or the right to inherit the original story outright (i.e. Level Dasher adopting A Daughter and her Dragon from Crystal Moose's account back in 2015). I was thinking more so along the lines of the latter, but I'd perfectly understand if they were uncomfortable with their story entirely leaving their account.

Disappointment hasn't been online since the 9th, so once you've seen this, I'll send them a PM to get their attention and see what they think.

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Yeah, that sounds reasonable. I was thinking more along the lines of the way we adopt things on Fim, with a transfer of the entire story. I'm game if you are

11398680
Alright, I've sent Disappointment that PM I talked about. Now we just wait to hear their opinion.

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