This is a story about an Alicorn who comes to Ponyville before all of the story starts. Adventually he must SAVE one of the main six (Rainbow Dash) while trying to stay together with his new girlfriend - Twilight. He must save her from Nightmare Moon.
PLEASE NO HARASSMENT IN THE COMMENTS: Harassment is when you tell me you don't like the story without reading it or when you make fun of me without anything against me. Don't do this please.
THIS IS DEDICATED TO MY GRANDFARDER WHO DYED IN WORLD WAR 2
Thanks!
Chapters (1)
this is the mermorial day story becuase my oc was in a war but forgot
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it is yes
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I dont get it? what is problem? if you think of spread hate i will ban you form my story
go away if your here to hate
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STOP SPREADING HATE
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no more i dont want you here
Spelling errors in the title. It should be 'died', not 'dyed'.
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looks liek more hate from you i see
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It's not hate if it's offering help with grammar and spelling.
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did you not read the desription there is no way you read they story please stop posting and go way
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This guy it seems does not accept criticism. At least Evictus acknowledges his mistakes!
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you are just a hater REA THE STORY FIRST
Please update this. My grandfander served 2.
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...I don't need to read the story to offer help with grammar and spelling. That's called constructive criticism, not hate.
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That is how you respect women.
My grandpappa didn't die in the second Great War, but I lurve ur respect of our vetrinarians.
Plz updayte.
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you are going to get banned if you keep on the going with this line of hate
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thank you so much! please upvote!
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LEAVE
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Blueem2man bad
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I'm sorry, but in what way am I being hateful? I am offering criticism, if anyone is being hateful, it is you for simply accusing me of hate.
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You realize this is the author throwing a fit for people offering help with grammar and spelling, right?
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are going to stop? this is no place for your wrod that make me feel not right. you are going to say sorry or be the banned because this is safe space for me and my fans who love me work unlike you. if you do not of the liking of this work please JUST LEAVE
Aww shiett he's back.
If you delete constructive criticism you are going to create a bad impression. The grammer is horrible. You could do with running this by an editor. By editor I don't mean one of your yes-men, but someone who is actually willing to tell you the truth and not play along with the whole 'Emperor's new clothes' charade.
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stop being mean to me grilfren, she is love of life
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...You realize that nothing I have done since I started commenting has been hostile, right? All I did was say that you are not accepting criticism.
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stop
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I know, right?
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...I apologize if my honest criticism seems like I'm being to her.
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I WARNED YOU IF YOU DONT STOP YOU WILL BE BANNED AND BLOCKED
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that is a bad apology. you make apology sound like her fault. you fault. orange man bad
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Thank you hubbie! 😘
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He can blow up a comment board like no other.
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I love you. No homo.
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Actually, some homo.
THIS IS A NOTE TO ALL MY FANS. THIS STORY WILL NOT BE BEING UPDATED BECAUSE OF HATERS
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You can block me, but only a moderator can ban me, and I am 99% sure they would side with me on this.
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Good, it was unreadable anyway.
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Boom! There go the comments!
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Hey baby buns, let's not be too hasty here.
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Agreed, my good fellow.
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she is my girl, back off
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you all upset her, she not come back to computer irght now
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No you back off. Windlife's bottom will be befuddled by me and me alone.
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Nobody/pony/engine was suggesting they were somebody else's.
And there’s the garbage fire I was expecting. Didn’t take long for the comments to devolve into a train wreck. Popcorn, anyone?
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You upset me with horrific grammer.
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too late. i have the owned the buttom for many year now