I see skies of blue and clouds of white, the bright blessed day, the dark sacred night
Have you ever thought about your place in the universe, well for Sunset she ponders over her place in the multiverse.
During a fateful walk home on a rainy day, she will get an answer to her place in this new world, and she may not be comfortable with it.
(This story takes place after "Monday Blues" https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lmhifH1Wx8k)
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Wow... That ending. Thanks for the feels.
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Thank you for both the fave and this comment
I was a bit unsure about this fic since it is my first published story on this site, but i am glad that you enjoyed it
Very good not bad of course.
Kind of want sequel. Great story.
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Thank you
I been thinking about writing a chapter about Sunset trying to find the woman she met (who is the human Sunsets mom) and try to talk with her. Not sure if i am gonna do it but at least i have an idea as how to continue the story.
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Hmm i would say do it.
The word I is always meant to be capitalized. Please respond to this comment.
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Sorry, I wrote this in a rush (made a bet to myself to publish it before New Years Eve), will definitely have to edit some parts, including making all I's capital
Thanks for your input, it's good to know where I failed so I can improve
Not bad for a first try. And let's face it, its what makes the most sense when it comes to where human Sunset is.
I'd say pay attention to how people construct paragraphs, and ask yourself why certain ones strike you and why others don't. Read a little of a great story then read some utter garbage. It'll help you grow as a writer.
Good Job.
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Thank you commenting and i appreciate the advice given.
Good luck with Barleycorn, the last chapter was one of the stories best and i am really looking forward to the conclusion.
Now i am going to write a story that is even more horrifying than any Lovecraft novel: Flash and Twilights Wedding
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Go for it. it would be an interesting story to read.
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Thanks for the encouragement, i'll start working on it when i get the time to
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Also I agree with the human sunset being dead. For it will be the only possibility way for sunset to be even able to live in the human world as long as she has with out trouble.
The ending was predicable but still a good ending nonetheless. The fact that she ran into the mother of the human sunset makes me question why I haven't seen a fic where someone from Equestria comes through the portal just with the goal of taking over their human counterparts life. It could be a thrilling horror story about the human version of the character trying to cling to their sanity while the Equestrian version grows more and more evil. Think of the classic double doppelganger story but EQG
You get used to it pretty quickly.
What a coincidence if you ask me.
I did not expect this plot twist.
Suddenly i saw a name, a name that made my think about my place here on Earth and several unansvered questions recieving a sudden ansver. Thoughts went back to the woman i had just fled from and now, my eyes started to swell with tears as i looked at the name inscribed on the tombstone.
Sunset Shimmer
that is hard