Queen Chrysalis is evil. She has a heart full of hatred. But little do we know that she wasn't always this way. Her family, childhood, and friends are all what turned her into the monster she is today.
We know that Princess Luna supposedly became Nightmare Moon because she thought she wasn't loved. But is that really all that happened? Starswirl the Bearded and Clover the Clever are determined to solve the mystery of why an innocent, kind, loving pony was turned into a real-life Nightmare.
Chapters (9)
This story has promise, (based purely on the lack of grammar mistakes and what seems to be decent lore) but you REALLY need to write longer chapters, the flip flopping 300 word chapters coupled with the practically nonexistent actual story, makes this fic really frustrating to read. Its like getting snap shots of a foot ball game, but only the touchdowns and kick offs.
Thank you for your thoughts. I will make the chapters longer and easier to understand in the future.
Thanks for the feedback!