Please tell me that Annabelle isn't gonna turn...

Sure, I'll tell you. Annabelle isn't going to turn anytime soon, but I don't know about later in the story. We'll just have to wait and see.

My sister's name is Annabelle! This hits home a lil too much for me cuz she has an mlp dress too. Scary how coincidence happens eh? Anyways as for feedback, your grammar is good(assuming your proof readers didn't have to fix THE ENTIRE CHAPTER(if you two did then kudos to you two, proof readers don't get enough credit/thanks from readers), your not stumbling around, nothing is awkward to read or say, and Generally the dialogue is lil bit lacking but that's to be expected In a first chapter amirite? As for content, very interesting and you have my attention, looking forward to more.
GODSPEED YOU MAGNIFICENT BASTARD

Warning: Contains bad jokes, a terrible storyline, bad grammar considering the author is a grammar nazi, and just a general fucked up story that shouldn't exist.

In other words, this fic is best enjoyed by those who enjoy reading for fun.

The journal entry format gives a bit of a World War Z vibe (the book, not the movie). I like it so far, and will be tracking it.

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I'm glad you like it! I'm pretty much used to writing journal entries at home, so I thought, "Why not just use that in the story instead of trying to figure it out later?" I know that probably doesn't make sense, but I'm a weird person and I pretty much never make sense to anyone.

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Lol. Thanks for the feedback! People don't get how much this stuff helps us writers, even a little can go a long way in helping a story. Anyway, I'll be adding more dialogue into it when I get to working on the next chapter. I still haven't figured out exactly how I'm going to do it yet. (I have but I dun like spoilers...)

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No, it makes sense. I myself tend to have trouble starting fics, but have so many ideas for between the covers, and have started writing from the middle. I've found that sometimes helps me figure out how the story got to where the good idea was. The journal style isn't a very common style that's used, but can definitely be interesting to both read and to figure out the writer's inferences.

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Well, why else would anyone read fanfiction? Or read any piece of fiction that isn't slapped down in front of us by school?

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To crap all over it because they can't stand people liking things they don't understand?

I've started writing chapter two and if my editors help me with it, I might have it out by... Sunday? Yeah. If they aren't available, I'll probably have it up by next Thursday. The max deadline will be next Saturday though.

Wow. Not even chapter 1 yet and this story is already getting more positive feedback than my other one. You guys actually like this?

I added two new tags because I realized that Alpha and his crew will likely have to meet the Princesses at some point in the story.

This is cool, can't wait until more

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I'm working on the second chapter as we speak, it'll be out soon. Although, it'll be named Chapter 1 because, you know, I already put up the prologue. Anyways, I'm glad you like it!

If you spot any errors, please let me know. I'm always looking to improve!

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Dude, can I help. I got some ideas