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A good start to a great sequel
This was funny
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I'm glad you think so. I was worried the new format and smaller chapter size would be a problem.
Twilight confirmed for best wingmare.
Lots of innuendo and shenanigan. Good to see this romantic comedy still going strong.
By the way, what's up with Twilight and her storage?
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She's the inventor and sole manufacturer of condoms in Equestria.
All that product has to be stored somewhere
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This had me rolling on the floor
Fun start so far! Ah, all the shenanigans that are happening and are about to happen, it's exciting.
Wailing banshee... it's always the silent ones, isn't it?
And Berry got some positive recognition! Now she won't be able to move since she'll be covered in mares... that are asking for her advice.
And Mac... who would've thought he'd be so open when given the chance? Than again, not really surprised; he was given the option to speak, so he did. I was just surprised that he had no shame. Two sides of one coin, I guess. No wonder Berry stuck with him.
Also also, a maternal Dash towards Scootaloo. That was amusing, yet oh so adorable.
Definitely looking forward to more!
Rainbow would love to make a joke about that.
So the storage inside the library are condoms. But how does that relate to the Apple clan?
Berry Punch, a genius brewer and an intimate activities adviser.
What are you? Opal?
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Less chance for hideous incest babies?
It's an inbred redneck Joke.(Exagerated for effect)
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Country hicks, rednecks, etc.
Who the heck was Fluffy, again, if he was actually introduced before?
Funny stuff, but you could do with an editor to fix this up a little bit.
Round one goes to BigMac!
I just loved this chapter. 
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Fuzzy briely appears in the last chapters of my prequel Story "My Life is a Glass". He's the One that was clopping in the neighbouring bed.
didn't realize ponies had a petrol-chemical/synthetic material industry to support modern condom manufacturing.
Also didn't even early senthetic condoms have something around a 5% failure rate? Pretty serious when you consider how many thousands are used by the average city over a weekend.
That last line. Also, interesting to have Big Macintosh show hidden interest towards his sister.
That, and just showing how guys operate in conversations; excellent touch
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I could feel my inherent barrel-chested beard-owning manliness being reaffirmed in this chapter. Just like a chat with the boys.
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I do believe they are magic condoms, as of the end chapters of the first story. In fact, I don't remember well but Twilight miiiight have been a tad overzealous in testing them out.
Imagine if any of us got into Berry's shoes
Adorasexy chapter
Don't think I'm going to follow this story anymore. This chapter was very well done and I love that Berry didn't just make an excuse and nope out on such a delicate situation, but the story, for awhile, has felt like it's struggling between being a clopfic and a story with clop in a bad way. Might pop in from time to time and give it another chance but for now... have an upvote and one less track.
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That's ok. I've done the same thing with plenty of stories.
I'm trying different things and not all of them can be winners to everybody.
Thank you for your feedback and being respectful about it.
Berry is like that one mom that no one ever has but you've always heard that someone, somewhere was raised by.
I think that your doing rather well Bob,
Writing is a craft that you can only get better at by actually doing it ,and trying different things.
In my opinion, your doing OK with this one. Keep writing and sharpen your skills.
The Monk
I'm liking Berry's characterization in this chapter. Well done.
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The Leopard Print Aunt, I've heard her referred to before.
Drunk, or at least has a reputation for it. Lived life a little *too* fully, and not really ashamed of it, and willing to tell you what's what in ways that your parents don't approve of, but they don't want to handle it themselves either so....
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I also think Berry is very mature, understanding, and responsible in this story. Twilight should learn a thing or two from her.
Berry would make a perfect sex-ed teacher.
... just make sure everyone is consenting
Still, Scoots learned a valuable lesson, and Berry has to step up her game because as the final words of this chapter stated, the filly's well-being is in her hooves now.
Ah well, basics learned, and that was fun! I really want to see how she handles the more advanced stuff
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Personally I like the direction you're going. Most of my favourite clopfics have relatively little clop.
Very enjoyable!
I really liked how Berry was able to help Scootaloo out. The correct knowledge at the right time can make a world of difference.
Damn. I love how humane they all are, but this right now is bound to end badly. But they'll all grow from it.
Hard Knock is really setting himself for a bad fall. Though he is lying to himself if he thinks Dash would see the relationship as a chore if she knew how much pain je is in.
Mac sure has one hell of a talk ahead of him.
I know you said it makes editing more fun like this, but this chapter is in serious need of editing. It's like they forgot how to use contractions, and there's missing words in more than a couple of places.
And Hard Knock is officially stupid. His marefriend is Ponyville's top athlete, if anyone would understand about damaging oneself from overdoing it it'd be her.
Rainbow need to learn a lesson that you can't expect a perfection from everypony. Though, I afraid she will learn it the hard way unless Berry intervene.
...I can now truely see why they deserve each other ... a kettle and a pot indeed.
Fortunately, he's a lucky idiot with people who love him.
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Could you give me an example for both? (Contractions and missing words)
It would help me.
This was a wholesome chapter in the beginning. Then it grew more interesting
I've only had half a pain killer to stave off a horrid stomach flu back when I was a teenager.
This stallion's gone through them like candy!
Anyways, you can gi at your own pace as far as updates, Bob. Whatever helps you feel comfortable when editing
I really am enjoying this story. I hope Big Mac can get some sense into Hard Knock. Because I have gone through a similar situation in my own life. You can only keep pushing yourself for so long and then something gives and not usually good or least not in my case. Looking forward to the next chapter.
This was awesome. Heartfelt, cute and hot at the same time. Kudos!
Thank for the update. Always happy to get more of this story
WOOO update!
Can't believe its been 2 years since the last, time flies lol
Hard Knock need to knock Dash's masculine and stubbornness out of her fast or he has to visit Nurse Redheart again.
Very nice.
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Great story! Shame it hasn't been updated in so long.