When life gives you lemons, don't make them into lemonade... you weaponize them...
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Not bad, though you could use an editor/proofreader to help catch some errors. It wasn't pervasive, but there were some here and there.
That aside, the story is set up to go in various directions. The next chapter will clarify a lot, and determine a lot about what the story will be over time. Simple but interesting enough starting point. I'll keep an eye on it.
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Sadly I wish I could get an editor or proofreader, but I can't, I'm on my own when it comes to this story, as I am it's creator and it's editor (a somewhat slow one at that), so I'm only able to do my best with what I've got at the moment, but as you said there were some errors, if you could please show me said errors, then that would be appreciated, if not, that is also fine. And thank you for the feed back, it is very appreciated.
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Give a try with this group: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors
I was lucky enough to find someone to help me edit, so you may have your own luck. Before that happened, I was flying solo as well.
From personal experience of working on your own, consider giving yourself a couple full days between finishing a chapter, then re-reading it to error check before posting. Takes some more patience, but I find that giving yourself that gap of time without looking at the piece in question lets your eyes catch a lot of stuff you'd been blind to previously. It is by no means perfect of course, but I found it helped me a fair bit.
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Thank you for the suggestion. I appreciate any help I can get.
i like where this is going
Story seems good, I'll plop it in my favs and stalk it for another update. Its good and looks promising so far, keep it up I expect good things
Yo this book is amazing!!! Keep it up
If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?
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That's a tough question... and I never really thought about that.
I can't really say what they would sound like, though if I had to guess, it would just be your every day male and female voices... except for the fact that Silver sounds younger than she is. (Why... well you can thank her ancestors for that. Though for right now we won't talk about that.)
So let's take into the account that, she's younger than James, yet she's older than 20 years, so her age would be around 21-23.
So taking that into the account she has to sound slightly more high-pitched than a normal woman in their 20s.
I'm not really sure if this answered your question, but it did raise a couple of questions for the future, for that I say thanks, I've been needing some thoughts for some future things and that helped a lot.
all the EEEEEEEEEs, all of them
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(happy bat pony noises!)
I liked this story but I have to put it in my dead, abandoned, forever in hiatus folder.