Despite being a mute, Vinyl was pretty confident about her new life in Canterlot High, until she met this mysterious cellist...
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What a fun story! Definitely tracking this one.
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Thank you!! First comment and it's a truly nice one! My ego feels good!
Gotta say, first chapter's got me hooked. Gonna follow this for sure
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Thank you! Feels good to be supported!
Not gonna lie, it felt a little rushed in a few places, and I think you should make some distinction between thoughts and spoken dialogue that doesn't hinge on 'Vinyl thought' all the time.
'I write thoughts in my own stories like this personally'
Other than that, this story could be something good and I'm curious to see where it goes. Always loved the idea of Vinyl being mute.
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I was actually wondering how to make the thoughts appear more clearly, especially after chapter two when a lot of chracters start talking...
An italic font isn't a bad idea at all, I might follow your advice and replace the "Vinyl thought" by this, these bothered me as well.
Concerning the "rushed" part, it is a feeling I had concerning the first two chapters, but I didn't want to developp too much into Vinyl's life before introducing the other characters.
Thanks for your opinion and advices!
Hope you'll enjoy the other chapters!
Saga.
This sounds really good.
Well I'm glad I'm not the only one who wrote Vinyl speechless. I like what you have in here, but this chapter felt bland... Nothing really happens, but at least it establishes the characters. I like Lyra's and Vinyl's dynamic here. I'll keep reading.
This could be good.
Where do you take your name from, author? I live near Sagami.
Just missing a letter