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"Fire fade.... the curse will spread I know.... but... more cinder will suffer... it must be another way.... to end this cycle.... or... it will be like this eternally?" the mysterious figure of the human in the shadow mumbles with his deep and cold voice while he's standing in front of the bonfire that have a coiled sword pin in it.

"Thou knows that the undead curse can't be cured... but it's thy wish to end the cycle. " the mysterious female voice said while the figure reach his hands out to the bonfire. The smog slowly comes out from the bonfire and covers his body

"But I know one thing that I could do it the best... Never loose hope." The male said while his body's slowly disappeared in the smog. a moment when the smog fades ,there is only a fading bonfire standing all alone with the maiden.

"Farewell ,ashen one. May thine find the last hope..... "

This story is a crossover between My Little Pony and Dark Souls. I know it sounds Ridiculous but It just another fanfiction so all credit to the original of every owner.

PS:This story is for entertainment. No benefits. and I must apologize for some either grammar error or vocabulary correction. English is not my native language. Hope you all understand.

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I love the concept of placing the Ashen One in Equestria before Nightmare Moon appears! There are a few errors, but you can edit these even after you finish writing them just to help improve your writing style. I know this because I did this with my own story because I noticed a few inconsistencies in my sentences, so I just went back and fixed them until the sentence made grammatical sense. Also, English is a hard language to learn because of all the rules you're not familiar with so don't sweat it, all that you need to worry about is the context of what you're trying to say to the audience.
All in all, great start I can't wait for more!:pinkiehappy:

@randablitz That's cheer me up a lot! :pinkiegasp: I will read it again to find error after I finish it! :twilightsmile: oh and this story will be more than you imagine

besides the messy English this is pretty good

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Yes ,it’s quite messy. I will fix it after I finish this stories

I love this story! I hope tat there's some lore from the Souls series, like the tragedy of Wolf Knight Artorias.

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