So only Three Gods want to do the right thing and help out everyone/everypony from the Caribou? 👍

While the others ignore Fluttershy's Plea and help for Equis/Equestria, and only care about who is the "Best God/Goddess"?!

Wow, those Gods and Goddess are a bunch of Jerks! 😡

I hope they could change their minds sooner or later?

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...Which is fitting for the majority of mythology, actually. Say what you will, but most gods and goddesses were assholes.

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Touche. 😒

they where eather jerks or super horny like zuse aka stick his dong into everything god of lighting.

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I'm considering adding a few others deities. The problem for is I dont want to use deities from the same pantheon and I play a limited amount of gods/goddesses

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It's Zeus. But, good point.

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Okay. But luckily, you got over 16 different Pantheons here.

And I can put the God Character List from the Official Website right here to make it easier.

https://www.smitegame.com/gods/

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I play the game so I know who the gods are. Not using Cthulhu in the story though.

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Well that's good. And as for Cthulhu? Thank God, I hope NOT! Because he is 999 Trillion Worse than the Caribou or anything bad. And he would rather F***** Up the poor MLP Multiverse.

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If you wish to continue this conversation you can dm me

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No thanks. I'm good.

I think it is a good start. And judging from the rating (which is a good rating for a FoE story) others agree, though I would say you need an Editor for this. It would improve your chapters.

The paragraphs are also rather big, so it would be easier to read to make them into more and smaller ones. Maybe being more descriptive could be good too. Like where Fluttershy is, the position she is in and if you do porn being more descriptive overall. It is an interesting choice to ignore Fluttershy for the end of the chapter, though since the god is here for her I assume he will meet up with her still.

Now to the red collar from the end. She didn't quite seem all that red-collary, and I hope to see more differences between them and black collars in the future. Maybe some purples too? It would be an interesting concept to see them react differently and not all behave the same because of the different experiences and trauma. Red collars after all are the willing ones, so I assume they have a higher sex drive and enjoyment of debauchery and now would have to deal with it after they are freed from the caribou.