I didnt want to... but i HAD to

The story is lame and boring. There really is no constructive criticism I can give, considering that the very foundation is a pile of crap. You truly missed what made Cupcakes good. You have to write what people want to read about, and this is not that. And no, don't think that I'm complimenting you by saying that your idea is truly evil, and that I can't stomach it, because this is not the case. Fluttershy is far too easy, making this story, and any like it, just seem desperate. Nobody cares because it's too obvious and contrived. And either way, I think we can all agree that Pinkamena is a laughing stock at this point anyway. She has no scare or shock factor anymore, and really, she never did (besides Cupcakes). By the way, I think you should seriously change your avatar. She just has no meaning anymore, and seems like a pussy compared to some newer, more original stories.

If you want to write horror, then ditch this and try again, because this can't be saved.

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Wow, I just realized what your name was... how very unfortunate.

yes oh yes she will see!

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Shoo, Mr. Negativity. Be gone DEMON!!!

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It's actually pretty good, bro. I hope you continue.

twos things one yes fluttershy her smile makes everyone uncomfable second cool story so far

ooohh suspensful, i like it! hope you make part 2 soon!

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I think I'm gunna wait til it's complete before I read it.

MAKE THE SECOND CHAPTER MAN!!!!

OH COME ON!!!!

891740 that will never happen

>Thunder Warrior I'm not saying it will, I'm not saying it won't. I do know that he's got plans for multiple stories and is busy. Depending upon free time, it can take days to write just ONE chapter. All it takes on my part is encouragement and patience.

926801 your right and when you put > someone when your replying to a comment people won't see it like they say "someone replyed to your comment" just saying

946245 I noticed the REPLY button right after I replied, funny enough. I like some of the new fics that have popped up.

946457 Xd yeah..

*laughs maniacally while stabbing random pony* Oh, Pinkamena...you have outdone yourself. But the party is just getting started.

Not to argue with the man himself, but I consider this a spin-off. Lookin' good. I went on a pinkamena fic tear tonight as I have school in a few hours... who cares.