Daring Do leaves an ancient artifact in the safekeeping of Rainbow Dash for a week. She has no idea that it contains the power to turn its user into a Succubus, or that her number one fan would foolishly unlock this power.
Oh come on, now that she's satisfied Twilight won't be as distracted. Right now she should reach around Rainbow's neck as if to hug her and unclasp the amulet and teleport to the other side of the room.
Great story that has me hoping the magic can "infect" other mares who get as intimate as Twilight did. That being said, I noticed two minor errors:
“Good,” Rainbow Dash quickly grabbed Thunderlane by the hand and practically dragged him to the nearest storage room. She closed the door behind them and locked it before pushing him against the wall. Thunderlane hardly had time to catch his breath before Dash pulled him into a deep kiss, their tongues wrestling with each other as they began to make out. It didn’t take long for Thunderlane’s hands to wonder. Dash had an almost electric feeling of arousal as she felt her partner’s hands caressing the curvature of her hips before moving around and groping at her rear.
Should be changed to "wander"
Rainbow Dash approached Twilight’s house with a stagger in her steps. Although that swagger was hiding an inner nervousness about what she was planning.
Interesting, though it might benefit from a bit more foreplay. Also for an anthro story, I noticed that there are no references to horns or wings, which seemed odd. But, like I said, still an interesting story.
nice work cantwait for the next chapter.
i love bimbos that are not mentaly retarded
Oh come on, now that she's satisfied Twilight won't be as distracted. Right now she should reach around Rainbow's neck as if to hug her and unclasp the amulet and teleport to the other side of the room.
I see some twidash and I love it
haven't read about scissoring in a long time, I like that a lot!
Great story that has me hoping the magic can "infect" other mares who get as intimate as Twilight did. That being said, I noticed two minor errors:
Should be changed to "wander"
Is it a stagger or a swagger?
Interesting, though it might benefit from a bit more foreplay. Also for an anthro story, I noticed that there are no references to horns or wings, which seemed odd. But, like I said, still an interesting story.
anymore?
8169057 do you want to be
O_O woah... that was... graphic